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What would change about your hometown?
I am living in Istanbul .Istanbul is a big, crowded and the most developed city of turkey.This situation brings some advantages and disadvantages. I really like to live in this city but if I could have chance to change things it would be a pollution. I want to try to examine below for specific reasons for change about my hometown which I mentioned.
First of all, the first and foremost reason is that pollution is getting be play core role in our lives. Everyone should be aware of the live of this beautiful city and should be have some responsibility. Spectrum of pollution like air pollution , water pollution lack of green field ,smog are diminish our life standard.
Besides children grew up out of the natural life. .Istanbul has some limited parks for children .They are always at home or in the shopping malls. They use electronic toy instead of basic natural things. But nowadays this situation is start to improve. Admittedly this is a promising step for us . The governors guiding us to contribute the green area with peoples helps.
A more subtle point we must consider that there is a lack of communication among nature and child. For instance when I was a child I can play in the garden I can breathe fresh air and I can see the animals even I can touch them. Children can see the animals in the books or documentary programs on TV.
Furthermore these children can be ill more easily when I consider my time when I was a child. Because they have weak immune . Pollution is can cause this problem. micro organism and bacteria can easily affect children immune system.
To sum up most of people can be unhappy with living in big cities however when it comes to me there is no big problem . I personally think only pollution is a bad side of Istanbul and I really believe that we can cope with this problem if people pay more attention for protect the environment and we can also gain from live in big and beautiful city. We can help our children much better if we what we always say protect the environment into practice.