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Kenta Posted 17 years ago
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Would you correct my English? (Apr.6)
Hello. I wrote two dialogues. Will you correct them?
No. 1
M: What's that brochure?
F: It's an ad(vertisement) for an investment plan. According to it, I can double
my money in [ within ] a year.
M: Do you believe it? You will lose all your money in the end [ finally ].
No. 2
M: I'm all dressed [ I'm in full dress ] and ready to go the wedding ceremony.
F: You'll have to shave off your beard.
M: Why? Nowadays young men wear [ have / grow ] a beard.
Thank you. kenta
No. 1
M: What's that brochure?
F: It's an ad(vertisement) for an investment plan. According to it, I can double
my money in [ within ] a year.
M: Do you believe it? You will lose all your money in the end [ finally ].
No. 2
M: I'm all dressed [ I'm in full dress ] and ready to go the wedding ceremony.
F: You'll have to shave off your beard.
M: Why? Nowadays young men wear [ have / grow ] a beard.
Thank you. kenta
Top answer
Hi, below are my suggested revisions in green- No. 1 M: What's that brochure? F: It's an ad about an investment plan.
- Hi, below are my suggested revisions in green- No.
- 1 M: What's that brochure?
- F: It's an ad about an investment plan.
- According to it, I could double my money in a year.
- M: Do you believe it?
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Hi, below are my suggested revisions in green-
No. 1
M: What's that brochure?
F: It's an ad about an investment plan. According to it, I could double my money in a year.
M: Do you believe it? You could lose all your money in the end.
No. 2
M: I'm all dressed and ready to go the wedding ceremony.
F: You'll have to shave off your bea
No. 1
M: What's that brochure?
F: It's an ad about an investment plan. According to it, I could double my money in a year.
M: Do you believe it? You could lose all your money in the end.
No. 2
M: I'm all dressed and ready to go the wedding ceremony.
F: You'll have to shave off your bea
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"An ad for" is fine.
I also think "You will lose" is okay since M is making what he feels a firm prediction.
I also think "You will lose" is okay since M is making what he feels a firm prediction.
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Thank you all. I'm very glad that three people answered my questions.
I'm happy! kenta
I'm happy! kenta
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Thank you all. I'm very glad that three people answered my question.
kenta
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