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Iris_es Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

Would you check my email template? Thanks

Please let me know my mistakes. If it's possible, please advice me the ways to improved it. Thank you.

'Dear Sir/Mdm,

This is to inform you that we received a mail from your company addressed to Mr. Phillip Kee.

Phillip Kee’s company BSI Management System formerly located here at Spring Singapore, 2 Bukit Merah Central, #14-02 has been shifted away. Kindly remove this address from your mailing list.

Thank you to your prompt action.

Have a great day.'
  

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Dear Sir/Ms This is to inform you that we received a mail from your company addressed to Mr. Phillip Kee. Phillip Kee’s company, BSI Management System, formerly located here at Spring Singapore, 2 Bukit Merah Central, #14-02 has been relocated.

— Anonymous

  • Dear Sir/Ms This is to inform you that we received a mail from your company addressed to Mr.
  • Phillip Kee.
  • Phillip Kee’s company, BSI Management System, formerly located here at Spring Singapore, 2 Bukit Merah Central, #14-02 has been relocated.
  • Would you kindly remove this address from your mailing list?
  • Thank you for your prompt action.
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Dear Sir/Ms

This is to inform you that we received a mail from your company addressed to Mr. Phillip Kee.

Phillip Kee’s company, BSI Management System, formerly located here at Spring Singapore, 2 Bukit Merah Central, #14-02 has been relocated. Would you kindly remove this address from your mailing list?

Thank you for your prompt action.

Yours
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Dear Sir or Madam:

This is to inform you that we have received a piece of mail from your company addressed to Mr. Philip Kee. Mr Kee’s company, BSI Management System, formerly located here at Spring Singapore, 2 Bukit Merah Central #14-02 has relocated.

Would you kindly remove this address from your mailing list?

Thank you for y
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Thanks for all the help!!
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Hi. Why did you use a present perfect, "has relocated", rather than a passive present perfect? Do you think the context doesn't warrant the use of a passive present perfect? If so, can you give me one reason for that?
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Yes, there is no reason to surmise that someone else relocated the company; the company relocated itself.
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Mr Mic, why "a piece" of mail when "sent a mail" comes out at almost 40,000 hits and "a piece of mail" returns just over 200 hits on Google Search?
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Probably because they are speaking of emails, Molly.
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Mister Micawber.
Probably because they are speaking of emails, Molly.
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So you say "a piece of email" in your dialect, do you?
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