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Lusiana R Posted 11 years ago
Letter Writing
would someone please revise my Letter
I just got an answer from a headhunting company, they've sent me a form which i need to fill in before they inform me further information about the interview process and i'm not sure if my answer below is correct and polite enough, please would someone revise it ? thankyou so much
Dear Ms. A
Thank you very much for considering my application.I remain very interested in the possibility of working with abc company.
I have attached the data of employment which has been completed according to your requested. Thank you very much for your consideration and i look forward to hearing further information from you.
Regards,
L
Dear Ms. A
Thank you very much for considering my application.I remain very interested in the possibility of working with abc company.
I have attached the data of employment which has been completed according to your requested. Thank you very much for your consideration and i look forward to hearing further information from you.
Regards,
L
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I would shorten this up and make a few changes as follows: Dear Ms. A : Thank you very much for considering my application. I remain very interested in the opportunity to possibility of working with abc company.
- I would shorten this up and make a few changes as follows: Dear Ms.
- A : Thank you very much for considering my application.
- I remain very interested in the opportunity to possibility of working with abc company.
- I have attached the data of employment which you has been completed according to your requested.
- Thank you very much for your consideration.
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I would shorten this up and make a few changes as follows:
Dear Ms. A:
Thank you very much for considering my application. I remain very interested in the opportunity topossibility of working with abc company.
I have attached the data of employment which youhas been completed according to your requested. Thank you very
Dear Ms. A:
Thank you very much for considering my application. I remain very interested in the opportunity to
I have attached the data of employment which you
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Sorry, I re-read the draft and I need to make a correction:
Say: I remain very interested in the opportunity to work with ABC company.
Also: is the document actually called "the data of employment"? If so, that is fine. If not, I would reword this: I have attached the information about my previous employment which you requested.
Say: I remain very interested in the opportunity to work with ABC company.
Also: is the document actually called "the data of employment"? If so, that is fine. If not, I would reword this: I have attached the information about my previous employment which you requested.
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