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Would someone please offer me their mechanics/grammar corrections?
Please accept my apologies if my essay is too long, but if you've the time, I'd appreciate it
I first came upon Robert Frost’s poem “Nothing Gold Can Stay”, when I was in the fifth grade. I was reading the novel “The Outsiders” by S.E. Hinton. One of the main characters, Johnny, emphasizes “Nothing Gold Can Stay,” which helps him understand that growing up and facing reality is a necessary part of life. At the time, I took it superficially, as only a pretty nature poem, but as I grow older I find that it’s meaning rings true in my own life.
There is so much beauty in life, from the changing autumn leaves to the smiles on people’s faces. Personally, I find the relationships to the people around me to be beautiful. To me, the experiences I’ve shared with the people I care about are “gold”. In the poem, gold stands for enjoyable things in our lives. But, according to Frost, these things cannot stay. The trees in autumn will eventually die and become bare winter branches. Smiles fade away from faces. In our present society, we witness young men and women leave their families to go off to fight in wars.
The line about how “Eden sank to grief” (6), references the fall from innocence into knowledge and maturity. I find this idea especially relevant to my life as I venture from the comfortable confines of the “high school bubble” into college and a life of adulthood. I will inevitably face challenges as an adult, beginning with the college admissions process to finding a good job and so on, but I believe that with a good foundation I can make the right choices in life. Frost, I believe, is saying that innocence cannot stay in its youthful, pliable form. It has to grow and change to become something of worth. Although it would be easy to stay in my comfort zone with my friends and my parents, I am looking forward to college. It is an extremely valuable opportunity to come into contact with new people. With a school like (this college), I can meet new people on campus, but all the while I am close enough to go home if needed.
Although the poem resonates of the temporariness of life, it is not meant to be depressing. It compels me to look at life with a “carpe diem” mentality. With my graduation from high school approaching all the more rapidly, I am faced with many important decisions about where I want to go in life. I want to go to college, major in psychology, eventually get a PhD, and be able to open my own practice. I’ve learned that you must plan for the future, because by the time you’re prepared for it, it has arrived.
When I look over my high school years, it's hard to say whether I have accomplished more then I haven't because, in the past three years, I've changed so much. The things I wanted as a freshman aren't the same things I want now. Things I thought would last forever have come and gone. Things I didn't think were important then mean the world to me now. There are things in life that I now love, that I could have never imagined caring about. In the end, what I have learned is to stop and savor all of the gold that glistens in life, because “nothing gold can stay”.
I first came upon Robert Frost’s poem “Nothing Gold Can Stay”, when I was in the fifth grade. I was reading the novel “The Outsiders” by S.E. Hinton. One of the main characters, Johnny, emphasizes “Nothing Gold Can Stay,” which helps him understand that growing up and facing reality is a necessary part of life. At the time, I took it superficially, as only a pretty nature poem, but as I grow older I find that it’s meaning rings true in my own life.
There is so much beauty in life, from the changing autumn leaves to the smiles on people’s faces. Personally, I find the relationships to the people around me to be beautiful. To me, the experiences I’ve shared with the people I care about are “gold”. In the poem, gold stands for enjoyable things in our lives. But, according to Frost, these things cannot stay. The trees in autumn will eventually die and become bare winter branches. Smiles fade away from faces. In our present society, we witness young men and women leave their families to go off to fight in wars.
The line about how “Eden sank to grief” (6), references the fall from innocence into knowledge and maturity. I find this idea especially relevant to my life as I venture from the comfortable confines of the “high school bubble” into college and a life of adulthood. I will inevitably face challenges as an adult, beginning with the college admissions process to finding a good job and so on, but I believe that with a good foundation I can make the right choices in life. Frost, I believe, is saying that innocence cannot stay in its youthful, pliable form. It has to grow and change to become something of worth. Although it would be easy to stay in my comfort zone with my friends and my parents, I am looking forward to college. It is an extremely valuable opportunity to come into contact with new people. With a school like (this college), I can meet new people on campus, but all the while I am close enough to go home if needed.
Although the poem resonates of the temporariness of life, it is not meant to be depressing. It compels me to look at life with a “carpe diem” mentality. With my graduation from high school approaching all the more rapidly, I am faced with many important decisions about where I want to go in life. I want to go to college, major in psychology, eventually get a PhD, and be able to open my own practice. I’ve learned that you must plan for the future, because by the time you’re prepared for it, it has arrived.
When I look over my high school years, it's hard to say whether I have accomplished more then I haven't because, in the past three years, I've changed so much. The things I wanted as a freshman aren't the same things I want now. Things I thought would last forever have come and gone. Things I didn't think were important then mean the world to me now. There are things in life that I now love, that I could have never imagined caring about. In the end, what I have learned is to stop and savor all of the gold that glistens in life, because “nothing gold can stay”.
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This is well written. From a very quick scan all of the start all I picked up was your use of the contraction it's when it should be the possessive 'its' in line 5.
- This is well written.
- From a very quick scan all of the start all I picked up was your use of the contraction it's when it should be the possessive 'its' in line 5.
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This is well written. From a very quick scan all of the start all I picked up was your use of the contraction it's when it should be the possessive 'its' in line 5.
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Hello Guest
In addition to NtB's comments:
1. 'Although the poem resonates of' > 'resonates with'.
2. 'One of the main characters, Johnny, emphasizes “Nothing Gold Can Stay,”' - I'm not sure 'emphasizes' is the right word here. Emphasis needs a particular context.
3. Last line - 'savor all of the gold that glistens'. 'Savoring gold' is an uncomfortable
In addition to NtB's comments:
1. 'Although the poem resonates of' > 'resonates with'.
2. 'One of the main characters, Johnny, emphasizes “Nothing Gold Can Stay,”' - I'm not sure 'emphasizes' is the right word here. Emphasis needs a particular context.
3. Last line - 'savor all of the gold that glistens'. 'Savoring gold' is an uncomfortable
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In your second to last paragraph, you say, "With my graduation from high school approaching all the more rapidly." In
In your second to last paragraph, you say, "With my graduation from high school approaching all the more rapidly." In
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