Would someone Please help proofread my essay for a college application?

I just got done writing an essay for a College application, but I'm not sure if it's good enough to get accepted. Please help!
The Prompt was:
It's easy to identify with the hero-the literary or historical figure who saves the day. Have you ever identified with a figure who wasnt a hero- a villain or a scapegoat, a bench-warmer or a bit player? If so, tell us why this figure appealed to you- and if your opinion changed over time, tell us about that, too.

The length was 500 words, but it was 635 words. Is that okay?

The essay:
Have I ever identified myself with a figure who wasn’t a hero? As a matter of fact, I have. I've felt like a villain of a story before. there are actions that I do that may resemble a villain such as being misunderstood by others, Thinking that the method of how I do things is the right way, or sometimes just being messing with my younger brother for fun. Whenever I watch a movie or a tv show the main thing about the villain that appealed to me the most is their point of view on life and how it reminds me of what goes on in the real world.

Code Geass is a Japanese anime show in which the main character, Lelouch vi Britannia, is a Byronic hero. He was born as the Eleventh Prince of the Britannia Imperial Family and seventeenth in line for the throne. His father, Charles zi Britannia, is the Emperor of Britannia. He was sent to Japan as a hostage for questioning his father's cold regard for his mother's assassination and the crippling of his blind sister Nunnally. When Britannia invaded Japan, he went into hiding with his sister, taking refuge with the Ashford family. It was during his stay when he met his first true friend, Suzaku. Seven years later, he discovers an enigmatic girl known as C.C., who grants him an ability called Geass, which allows him to give irresistible commands. Seeking to build a peaceful world for his sister, he pursues the destruction of Britannia under the guise of his masked alter-ego “Zero”.

This Byronic hero possesses strong beliefs that define both his actions and his motivation for them. He is against his father’s beliefs of social Darwinism and with his mask and his Geass “Zero” becomes a leader of a resistance movement to defeat his father and the Britannia Empire. He believes that the world can live in cooperation rather than competition and conflict. In order to him to reach this goal, he believes that the ends justify the means; He is willing to commit evil if it means committing unforgivable sins and bringing up a worse evil in the process: "To defeat evil, I shall become an even greater evil."

He was a symbol for all the Japanese people, he was the hope that they have lost during the war. When in War he uses the battle field like it is his chess board. He is the leader of his army, the King, and the soldiers are his pawns. His intelligence helps tremendously during the battles of war. If it was not for him, the Black Knights would not know what to do during the war: "If the king doesn't move, then his subjects won't follow." He eventually took over the Britannia Empire and became King. All seems well, but in order for him to completely erase the Britannia Empire he became an evil ruler. By doing this he sacrificed himself, absorbing everyone’s hatred and in the end, with the help of his best friend, was killed along with the hatred that the world had. His method of making the world a better place for his sister may not have been the best, but to him it was the only way he could use his abilities to turn this world around to protect the people that he loves the most.

To myself and many others, he is the most realistic hero and through his actions the viewers can see how much he cherish his sister and the others around him. Lelouch may not have been the idealistic hero that everyone loves, but he reminded me that not all heroes are flawless and that not all villains are heartless and I will forever remember him for being hero who is most similar to a human being in this world.