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I was browsing English sites and this one kind of tripped me up a bit because I am having a little trouble comprehending the content as to what the university's staff was trying to say. Is it me or the person who wrote the webpage. Thank you for the comment in advance.
http://www.cityu.edu.hk/edge/ge/

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Which part are you having trouble with?

Dimsumexpress · Answer

Thanks AlpheccaStars for your reply.
The reason I posted this article was because I felt the writing was a getting a bit wordy and the sentences were too long. It didn't come off as clean and smooth when I read it. So I was wondering, was the problem my comprehension? or the construction seemed a little bumpy. There is no grammar issue that I could see. Just wonder if the tone sounds off to you.
That's all.

Excerpt:
City University is committed to providing students with a quality education that develops their intellectual abilities while providing them with the skills and knowledge base they will need to successfully navigate the complexities of the 21st century.
To lead a fulfilling and successful life against a backdrop of rapidly changing global needs requires a wide range of skills and knowledge. These include the ability to think critically, to reason logically and quantitatively and to communicate effectively. In addition, it is important that everyone has an understanding of sciences that increasingly shape our environment, an awareness of the cultural movements and diversity that have shaped societies and their values, and an appreciation of the enduring arts that express, inspire and continually challenge these values.
GE, in essence, augments and rounds out the specialised training students receive in their majors by enabling them to achieve a breadth of knowledge through exposure to multiple disciplines. GE is the glue that holds disciplines together.
GE is the core of an undergraduate education. It is “general” in that GE provides students with a comprehensive educational experience and prepares them for lifelong learning; it promotes intellectual curiosity and a love of learning.
In other words, GE gives our students an EDGE.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

It is advertizing copy written for a particular target audience, probably someone with experience in a large company who wants to get an advanced degree, or for parents who have lofty expectations for their children.
The Gunning Fog Index is probably quite elevated compared to the average web site.

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Dimsumexpress · Answer

AlpheccaStarsThe Gunning Fog Index is probably quite elevated compared to the average web site.

Thanks AlpheccaStars,
If you don't mind, would you cast your person opinion on the writing, would you consider it fluent, uncluttered? But it is ok if you'd rather reserve your opinion, I understand. Thanks you much!

AlpheccaStars · Answer

I'd call it professional, sophisticated, and intellectual, but not overly erudite and elitist.

Dimsumexpress · Answer

Thanks AlpheccaStars, Appreciate your opinions.

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