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Inesinha Posted 11 years ago
Vocabulary
Wordy?? Can you correct please?
This is the sentence... does it sound bad? How would you improve it?
"Maternity leave was most stressful for one of the participants, who had her child/baby right before the peak season, which resulted in her interrupting maternity leave in order to ensure an orderly flow of business in the company during this crucial period of the year. In contrast, maternity leave was most easily managed in the case of women who were in non-management positions at the time."
How does this sound to a native speaker? ... bearing in mind that this is part of a thesis, so it shouldn't sound too informal
would you sayhaving a child or a baby? which sounds more formal and appropriate in the context?
Thank you in advance ***
"Maternity leave was most stressful for one of the participants, who had her child/baby right before the peak season, which resulted in her interrupting maternity leave in order to ensure an orderly flow of business in the company during this crucial period of the year. In contrast, maternity leave was most easily managed in the case of women who were in non-management positions at the time."
How does this sound to a native speaker? ... bearing in mind that this is part of a thesis, so it shouldn't sound too informal
would you sayhaving a child or a baby? which sounds more formal and appropriate in the context?
Thank you in advance
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Hello, inesinha—and welcome to English Forums. Thank you for registering as a member. inesinha How does this sound to a native speaker?
- Hello, inesinha—and welcome to English Forums.
- Thank you for registering as a member.
- inesinha How does this sound to a native speaker?
- Pretty good.
- I can, however, suggest a few style changes (since you want 'formal'): Maternity leave was most stressful for a participant who gave birth immediately before the peak sea son: she interrupted her maternity leave in order to ensure an orderly flow of business for the company during this crucial period.
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Hello, inesinha—and welcome to English Forums. Thank you for registering as a member.
Maternity leave was most stressful for a participant who gave birth immediately before the peak season: she interru
inesinhaHow does this sound to a native speaker?Pretty good. I can, however, suggest a few style changes (since you want 'formal'):
Maternity leave was most stressful for a participant who gave birth immediately before the peak season: she interru
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I was correcting my text now and I would like to reinforce that I really like your suggestion. I have to keep in mind that short sentences are preferrable in English!
Thank you so much!
Thank you so much!
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