Wording in paragraph

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I have used wonderful twice. Is this okay? Is there any other word I can use to make flow better?

You have grown into an exceptional young man, Nicholas, with limitless compassion, kindness and respect for others. Through your caring nature, you have met many wonderful people. Your hard work and dedication have brought you many wonderful opportunities and achievements and will continue to do so throughout your journey in life. You always strive to do your best that I couldn’t be more proud of you.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Hello, kfrosini — and welcome to English Forums. Are you still working on that letter to your son? I thought you had mailed it already.

I have used wonderful twice. Is this okay?-- There is no intrinsic reason to avoid using a word twice in a passage of that length, but then again 'wonderful' is a rather vague and overused word, and I am sure that you can do better.

Is there any other word I can use to make flow better? -- outstanding, exceptional, fantastic, marvellous: those are all as vague as wonderful but at least offer variety. In your particular paragraph, you could and should use more specific adjectives like challenging, remarkable, exceptional, fortunate, memorable, etc.

Kfrosini · Answer

I'm so sorry. I'm getting a little stressed over this. It's not flowing like I would like. Would you please help me.

This is my letter -

When you were a baby you amazed me with every breath you took. Your determination to survive was endless. You were my miracle.

When you were a toddler you amazed me with every sound you made, every word you spoke, every step you took and every smile you smiled. You were my courage.

When you were a young boy you impressed me with your strong-mindedness, confidence and creativity. You were my faith.

When you were a teenager you impressed me with your independence, sense of humor, caring nature and lightheartedness. You were my strength.

You have grown into an exceptional young man, Nicholas, with limitless compassion, kindness and respect for others that I couldn’t be more proud of you. Through your caring nature, you have met many wonderful people. Your hard work and dedication have brought you many wonderful opportunities and achievements and will continue to do so throughout your journey in life. You always strive to do your best. You have much to be proud of.

Mister Micawber · Answer

You said that you have sent the letter already.  I have already told you in your previous thread that your son will prefer YOUR words, whatever they are, to ours.

Kfrosini · Answer

I have not sent it. They are still my words. It's not flowing like I would like. It is just the last paragraph that i am having a problem with.

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