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Lisa Brinkmann Posted 7 years ago
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Is this sentence clear or is there a better choice:

This change from 03/15/2019 is due to delays that we had with requests made by the City of Florissant and requests for changes that the customers made.

  

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The sentenced can be easily shortened to: This change from 03/15/2019 is due to delays that we had with requests made by the City of Florissant and by customers. However, something is not clear. It reads as though there were delays with requests.

  • The sentenced can be easily shortened to: This change from 03/15/2019 is due to delays that we had with requests made by the City of Florissant and by customers.
  • However, something is not clear.
  • It reads as though there were delays with requests.
  • A comma before “with” dispels that possible misinterpretation:
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The sentenced can be easily shortened to:

This change from 03/15/2019 is due to delays that we had with requests made by the City of Florissant and by customers.

However, something is not clear. It reads as though there were delays with requests. A comma before “with” dispels that possible misinterpretation:

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