Winter

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Winter season is in the offing with cold zephyrs making the whole climate awful. The day starts with less scintillating rays of sun, leaving you shiver. The morning mouthed vapors seem more visible with a cup of hot tea or coffee. The unwillingness to wake up early in the morning breaks up finally when the cosy environment underneath the blanket is exposed to the outside temperature.
Afternoon to Evening phase brings some relief in life when sun god spreads blessings with his heat. The picture of sun rays sneaking the doors of houses looks adorable. Everybody stretches their arms to virtually take sunbath. The game of hide and seek between sun and clouds adds some romantic moments in the whole day. This moment of romance ends at the time of sun set, signalling the start of later half of the day.
This is the time when everyone starts heading towards their respective homes/ shelters to beat the cold. The dark and windy night signalling bad omen leaves a ray of hope for better next morning.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

I have underlined some problem areas:

Winter season is in the offing with cold zephyrs making the whole climate awful. The day starts with less scintillating rays of sun, leaving you shiver. The morning mouthed vapors seem more visible with a cup of hot tea or coffee. The unwillingness to wake up early in the morning breaks up finally when the cosy environment underneath the blanket is exposed to the outside temperature.
Afternoon to Evening phase brings some relief ~~in life~~ when sun *** spreads blessings with his heat. The picture of sun rays sneaking the doors of houses looks adorable. Everybody stretches their arms to virtually take sunbath. The game of hide and seek between sun and clouds adds some romantic moments in the whole day. This moment of romance ends at ~~the time of~~ sun set, signalling the start of later half of the day.
This is the time when everyone starts heading towards their ~~respectiv~~e homes~~/ shelters~~ to beat the cold. The dark and windy night signalling bad omen leaves a ray of hope for better next morning.

You have some cute ideas, but it is mostly too verbose and uneven in effect.

Pawan24 · Answer

Thank You. what should I do to improve my writing skills?

The coldest season of the year, winter is in the offing, with cold zephyr making the climate awful. The day starts with less scintillating (plz, point out the mistake here?) rays of sun, leaving you to shiver. With morning mouthy vapors seem more visible with a cup of hot tea or coffee. And finally, the unwillingness to wake up early in the morning breaks-up when the cosy environment underneath the blanket is exposed to the outside temperature.
Afternoon to Evening (What is the correct way to express the day shift?) phase brings some relief when the sun *** spreads blessing with his heat. The picture of sun rays sneaking in the doors of houses looks amazing. Everyone stretches their arms for the virtual sunbath. The game of hide and seek between sun and clouds adds some romantic moments in the day. The moment of romance ends at sun set, signalling the start of second half of the day.
This is the time when everyone starts heading towards their homes to beat the cold. The dark and windy night signalling a bad omen leaves a ray of hope for better morning.

Mister Micawber · Answer

what should I do to improve my writing skills?-- Don't try to squeeze so many adjectives into a sentence or use so many ways of saying the same thing in the same breath.

You have changed far more than the areas I indicated, which does not help you focus in on the problems. I can do little except underline the new set of problems:

The coldest season of the year, winter is in the offing, with cold zephyr making the climate awful. The day starts with less scintillating (plz, point out the mistake here?-- 'Scintillating' is not related to heat) rays of sun, leaving you to shiver. With morning mouthy vapors seem more visible with a cup of hot tea or coffee. And finally, the unwillingness to wake up early in the morning breaks-up when the cosy environment underneath the blanket is exposed to the outside temperature.
Afternoon to Evening (What is the correct way to express the day shift?-- I know of none except 'dusk', which is afternoon to evening but is obviously not what you intend.) phase brings some relief when the sun *** spreads blessing with his heat. The picture of sun rays sneaking in the doors of houses looks amazing. Everyone stretches their arms for the virtual sunbath. The game of hide and seek between sun and clouds adds some romantic moments in the day. The moment of romance ends at sun set, signalling the start of second half of the day.
This is the time when everyone starts heading towards their homes to beat the cold. The dark and windy night signalling a bad omen leaves a ray of hope for better morning.

Pawan24 · Answer

Thank you for your suggestions.

The coldest season of the year, winter is in the offing, with cold breeze making an awful climate. The day starts with less scorching (I could not find the word "susk", is it spelled correctly?) rays of the sun, leaving you shivering. With morning vapors from mouth seem more visible with a cup of hot tea or coffee. And finally, the unwillingness to wake up early in the morning breaks when the cosy environment underneath the blanket is exposed to the outside temperature.
Afternoon time brings some relief when the sun *** spreads rays of heat. The picture of sun rays sneaking in the doors of houses look amazing. Everyone stretches their arms for virtual sunbath. The game of hide and seek between sun and clouds adds some romantic moments to the day. The romantic moments end at sunset, signalling the start of the second half of the day.
This is the time when everyone starts heading towards their homes to beat the cold. The dark and windy night signals a bad omen, with a ray of hope for the better morning.

Mister Micawber · Answer

Sorry-- a stupid typing error. The word is 'dusk', and I have edited it above.

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