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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago

Will you read my short poem and see if it is any good?

He was my fairytale; strong and beautiful.

He held me high through the toughfest of things.

But yet he hurt me the smallest thing.

He was my fairytale until he broke my heart.

I caught him oneday holding another one.

He was my fairytale.

But now I hold myself high through the toughfest of things.

One of the toughfest things was getting over my fairytale.

(I know it's not great but it is my first poem so can you help?)
  

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You can start by fixing the obvious grammatical and orthographic errors (underlined below). At the very least, a poet should be very careful of these things: He was my fairytale ; strong and beautiful. He held me high through the toughfest of things.

— Mister Micawber

  • You can start by fixing the obvious grammatical and orthographic errors (underlined below).
  • At the very least, a poet should be very careful of these things: He was my fairytale ; strong and beautiful.
  • He held me high through the toughfest of things.
  • But yet he hurt me the smallest thing.
  • He was my fairytale until he broke my heart.
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You can start by fixing the obvious grammatical and orthographic errors (underlined below). At the very least, a poet should be very careful of these things:

He was my fairytale; strong and beautiful.
He held me high through the toughfest of things.
But yet he hurt me the smallest thing.

He was my fairytale until he broke my heart.
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