Will you help me with my motivation letter (ML)?

Hi! I'm writing a motivation letter (ML) for applying a master scholarship in France. Will you guys help me fix errors in my ML? Thank you very much with your help. Teddy.


I am the first son of three brothers and a sister in my family. When I was 9 years-old, I found a university book belonged to my father explaining about nuclear energy and atomic bom. “Wow, this is amazing!” I exclaimed to myself as I wondered around whether this huge amount of energy could be utilized to generate electricity. This “spark of knowledge” has brought me to learn more about science especially nuclear energy. To satisfy my curiosity I decided to take a course in nuclear engineering at The Department of Engineering Physics-Gadjah Mada University in 2001. Subjects like nuclear reactors and radioactivity interested me the most. From these subjects I found out that there are many different types of nuclear reactors in the world such as PWR (Pressurized Water Reactors), BWR (Boiling Water Reactors) and HTR (High Temperature Reactors). I also learned that the safety systems of nuclear reactors increase rapidly every generation. and accidents have given a lesson to the world to increase the safetiness and designs of nuclear reactors in the future. Long after that in 2005, my Department invited two guest lecturers from NSRA (Nuclear Safety and Reactor Analysis) to give a “studium generale” on advanced nuclear reactor design and safety systems. I followed the lecture with great appraisal. My mind “blew out” to learn more on nuclear reactors as they explained the lecture to students. At that time I have decided my path to become a researcher in nuclear engineering.

Being actively as a student, I was working as a laboratory assistant at both Laboratory of Radioactivity Analysis and Laboratory of Nuclear Electronics. Working as an assistant has “flourished” my skills of analyzing and solving problems, hard-working and working together with people of different backgrounds and cultures. Soon after that, I had a chance to do a field practical work at BATAN (Natioanl Nuclear Energy Agency of Indonesia) located in for two months. I experienced it first hand the real atmosphere of research at high level. I became a research assistant at BATAN and my main task was helping to design an apparatus for making HTR fuel kernels. “What a wonderful experience. I will never forget it in my entire life.” I said it to myself as I built the apparatus with researchers from BATAN. At that time, I was also actively involved in an organization namely HFI (Indonesian Physical Society). Being a member of this prestigious organization has given me a chance to discuss with the experts of nuclear energy around . I learned so much from these nuclear experts about the condition and development of nuclear energy in today and in the future.

After graduating from in 2005, I had an offer to work as a laboratory assistant at Laboratory of Radioactivity Analysis for a semester. In February of 2006, BATAN held an aggreement with my former Department to conduct a project on preliminary study of DUPIC fuel cycle. My former Department invited me to become a research assistant in this project. I get a job to analyze the fuel cycle of DUPIC compared with other fuel cyles from different nuclear reactors. The other work I do is to maintain the project runs on its track and to make sure that the project will be finished on time. Making a project report, summarizing, editing and presenting it in front of the project advisors have given me another “taste” of working.

My former experience and knowledge have given me a strong basis to study at the level of master. I would like to take my master course in because is one of the nations in the world that actively involved in research and development of nuclear reactors. I will challenge myself to finish my study in nuclear engineering. I hope that after completing my study I could become a researcher in the field of nuclear engineering. I do hope this will bring a good contribution to the development of nuclear energy in as well as in the world. As JFK once said, “Ask not what your country does for you, but what you can do for your country.”