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Hi, Question:Which sentence structure is better?For the first sentence, do I need the word "some"?Sentence1:I am an individual who has some excellent academic achievements, including x, y and ZSentence2:I am an individual with excellent academic achievements, including x, y and ZThanks

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

It's obvious that you are an individual.

I suggest the more dynamic and simpler

I have excellent academic achievements, including x, y and z.

As I just suggested in your other thread, my advice is for you to post your complete cover letter for us to help you with. Posting each sentence in a separate thread, to be considered in isolation, is not a good idea, in my opinion.

Clive

James do · Answer

Hi uktous,

I'm agree with Clive. Clearly, you are an individual, so you don't need to introduce that you're an individual or a people unless you want to emphasize that you're a special individual as in the sentence "In this school, I'm a special individual with ability to speak 6 languages" or some ideals like that.

Moreover, the word "person" seems to be proper to use in this sentence like "I'm a person who...".

In the first your sentence, whether you use the word "some" or not is the same, but using it seems to be modest and informal with your sentence.

I think the second your sentence is better than the other, but you shold write the sentence as does Clive.

Uktous · Answer

Hi, Clive,

You are very kind.

The reasons for "post each sentence in a separate thread" are that I would like to learn "why a particular sentence is better than another sentence" and " the usage and grammar of some words".

I understand that if I post the whole content in a single thread, you can produce a better letter.

However, I hope that I could be able to write some "good quality sentences" in interview. Therefore, I always ask each individual sentence.

I think if next time I should not only ask each sentence seperately, but also post the whole answer of an application form question to here if possible.

You are very good.

Thanks

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