Who can help me to modify my motivation letter?thankyou very much!

In my childhood, I read a book called<Inner Canon of Huangdi >(one of the earliest medical books in China), an interesting explain attracted me: illness is psychosomatic. With the curiosity of psychology, I began to read some psychology books, and then my curiosity gradually turned into interest. I chose psychology as my major with no doubt when I became a university student. I love psychology not only from my bottom of the heart, but also believed that I had the talent: a helping heart to others, and a sensitive perception to people’s mood.

I love to do yoga since I was a high school student, in the college life, study essential oil become my hobby. After reading<>, a thought rose in my mind: combining the psychology, yoga and essential oil so as to promote the wholesomeness and people’s life quality. In China, this kind of research is rarely to see, Psychological researches are more advanced and comprehensive in western countries. It is better for me to choose to study abroad to gain the advanced psychology knowledge, supplement my own imperfect. I hope to be a number of your school,and accept the best psychological education.

In my university period, i studied psychology courses()and use the weekend time to go to()to strengthen statistics and psychology experiment learning. Besides, I studied yale and harvard public course,especially the introduction of psychology and read some english edition books of psychology (). therefore, I have the confidence to adapt the study of psychology in your school.

During the university period, I was selected as the class commissary of studies for my excellent performance. I not only got first prizei in the xxxx contest but also took active part in various of psychological practice actions. In the summer vacation of 2009, I represented my school to make a program helping the children suffered the wenchuan earthquake to release their mental pressure. As the leader of mental health association of university, I have set up many psychological and related activities, during which my classmates and I constructed our own the consultation room to help the students who felt uneasy  and regularly organise a few of activities to learn some corresponding psychology knowledge,

I am eager to render services or help others,I firmly believe helping others is helping oneself, I volunteered to raise money to help the secondary school students in disadvantaged areas, I also spent my spare time to go to the school for deaf-mutes to provide proper counselling. I still remember the scene when I first went to the school; it was a foggy morning, I wore a white dress, and when I still feel hesitated on whether I can communicate with them successfully, a little girl, who was in the classroom, looked at me curiously and then threw me a sweet smile and made a sign language. Although I didn't understand her dactylology, the well-intentioned  smile made me know she likes my pretty dress, At that moment, I enjoyed the communication, though it without words, the soul of communication gave me more joy. When I was about to leave the school, I met an old lady who is one of the students’ grandmother. I took the lady’s hand and went down the stairs together, in the short trip, the lady expressed her gratitude continuously, saying that I bring the children knowledge and kind attention. At that moment, I felt that even though my power is limited, I would like to pay all my efforts, particularly my professional knowledge, to help more people.

Compared with the high school students, i have a complete psychology theory ,a more pround  professional understand , a more mature plan about future study..I want to become a member of your school and get abundant study recources of psychology,promoting myself and helping others.