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Tengyue zhang Posted 14 years ago
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Do you use mobile phone today? Most of us will say ‘yes’, we use mobile phone everyday. But under the superficial glamour, you might not be aware of the harm that mobile phones's radiation could bring to the user. The mobile phone's radiation could cause brain cancer to the userAccording to some media reports from England, if you have been using mobile phones for more than ten years, the possibility of having brain cancer would be doubled.This is a serious warning so far regarding using mobile phones. So, my dear audience please cut down your mobile phone usage and enjoy a longer healthier life.
Many drivers have this experience of having a phone conversation while driving. According to a Carnegin Mellon University's research, the report concluded that the driving attention of a driver decreases by as much as 30% simply by listening to someone over a phone call; therefore the risk of being involved in an accident could be lowered by not making any phone conversation while driving. We should not compromise communication convenience by sacrificing health and safety practice.
There is also a phenomenon called 'Mobile Phone Syndrome'; Users who have this syndrome always think that their phones are ringing when actually they are not. They are constantly checking to see if they have received new mails in their inboxes, new updates for installation of apps, new notifications from social networks like qq, webchat, facebook and the likes of twitters, not to mention countless news feeds from different websites' subscriptions. The list goes on and on.
However, the evolution of mobile phones has brought upon us tremendous changes in our lifestyle. From the fundamental functions of making and receiving calls, sending and receiving text, smartphone these days bring us the functions of multi-media platform with richness. TV, camera, Internet, alarm clock, calendars, online shopping, banking, social networking, games, music, movies and all sorts of information are available. On average, the ratio of number of mobile phones to the population of a developed countries are 3 to 1. We have to embrace technology with an environmentally-friendly attitude which should be noted by all users and service providers. Nevertheless, mobile technology does bring us security, entertainment and convenience and we cannot afford to lose it.
Thank you very much!
Many drivers have this experience of having a phone conversation while driving. According to a Carnegin Mellon University's research, the report concluded that the driving attention of a driver decreases by as much as 30% simply by listening to someone over a phone call; therefore the risk of being involved in an accident could be lowered by not making any phone conversation while driving. We should not compromise communication convenience by sacrificing health and safety practice.
There is also a phenomenon called 'Mobile Phone Syndrome'; Users who have this syndrome always think that their phones are ringing when actually they are not. They are constantly checking to see if they have received new mails in their inboxes, new updates for installation of apps, new notifications from social networks like qq, webchat, facebook and the likes of twitters, not to mention countless news feeds from different websites' subscriptions. The list goes on and on.
However, the evolution of mobile phones has brought upon us tremendous changes in our lifestyle. From the fundamental functions of making and receiving calls, sending and receiving text, smartphone these days bring us the functions of multi-media platform with richness. TV, camera, Internet, alarm clock, calendars, online shopping, banking, social networking, games, music, movies and all sorts of information are available. On average, the ratio of number of mobile phones to the population of a developed countries are 3 to 1. We have to embrace technology with an environmentally-friendly attitude which should be noted by all users and service providers. Nevertheless, mobile technology does bring us security, entertainment and convenience and we cannot afford to lose it.
Thank you very much!
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Hi Tengyue, Your article was written very well, just a few minor mistakes I corrected for you as seen below: Do you use mobile phone today? Most of us will say ‘yes, we use mobile phones everyday'. But under the superficial glamour, you might not be aware of the harm that mobile phones' radiation could bring to the user.
- Hi Tengyue, Your article was written very well, just a few minor mistakes I corrected for you as seen below: Do you use mobile phone today?
- Most of us will say ‘yes, we use mobile phones everyday'.
- But under the superficial glamour, you might not be aware of the harm that mobile phones' radiation could bring to the user.
- The mobile phone's radiation could cause brain cancer; according to some media reports from England, if you have been using mobile phones for more than ten years, the possibility of having brain cancer can be be doubled.
- This is a serious warning regarding the use of mobile phones.
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Hi Tengyue,
Your article was written very well, just a few minor mistakes I corrected for you as seen below:
Do you use mobile phone today? Most of us will say ‘yes, we use mobile phones everyday'. But under the superficial glamour, you might not be aware of the harm that mobile phones' radiation could bring to the user. The mobile phone's radiation could cause brain cancer; acco
Your article was written very well, just a few minor mistakes I corrected for you as seen below:
Do you use mobile phone today? Most of us will say ‘yes, we use mobile phones everyday'. But under the superficial glamour, you might not be aware of the harm that mobile phones' radiation could bring to the user. The mobile phone's radiation could cause brain cancer; acco
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