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Xinhuce Posted 21 years ago
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who can give a modification for my composition

there are several reasons for the decline ,Firstly, some new roads were built and some narrow streets were widened ,which quickened the folw of traffic .Secondly, a new traffic law was made and came into force. the new traffic regulations laid down in the law are more strict than the old ones.Thirdly ,the city administrator strengthened education ,and people began to be aware of its importance .In addition, standardised driving test and staggering people's holidays and office hours also played important roles in the decline of car accidents in this city
  

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Hi, There are several reasons for the decline. Firstly, some new roads were built and some narrow streets were widened ,which quickened the flow of traffic. Thirdly, the city administrator strengthened driver education, and people began to be aware of its importance.

  • Hi, There are several reasons for the decline.
  • Firstly, some new roads were built and some narrow streets were widened ,which quickened the flow of traffic.
  • Thirdly, the city administrator strengthened driver education, and people began to be aware of its importance.
  • In addition, standardizing driving tests and staggering people's holidays and office hours also played important roles in the decline of car accidents in this city.
  • Best wishes, Clive
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Hi,

There are several reasons for the decline. Firstly, some new roads were built and some narrow streets were widened ,which quickened the flow of traffic. Secondly, a new and stricter traffic law came into force.Thirdly, the city administrator strengthened driver education, and people began to be aware of its importance. In addition, standardizing driving tests and
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Hello Clive

Thirdly, the city administrator strengthened driver education, and people began to be aware of its importance.

What does the pronoun 'it' stand for?

paco
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Hi Paco,

'driver education'. Although I didn't alter the word 'education' from the original, I don't think it makes a great phrase in terms of meaning. That's because I don't see that a city administrator would have much control over driver education. Perhaps 'driver awareness'?

Clive

PS I'm not always good at naming things in grammar, but to
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Hello Clive

Thank you for the reply. I took the 'education' in the original text as 'public education on (obeying) the traffic rules'. So I though it is not quite good to use 'its' as the modifier of the 'importance'. My try was like below, but anyway I think, generally speaking, it is a job tough for you to correct a composition made by a questioner who supposedly lives in situations dif
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HI again,

I think your version is a pretty good interpretation. Correcting someone's writing can be pretty subjective.

Clive
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thank everyone very much ,i see

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