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Offroad Posted 16 years ago
Vocabulary

Who blew it? Was it me or her?

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We went out, she, her mother, a friend, a girl, a guy and I. We headed to a beach 5 miles from the city. This was supposed to be the mean we could get to know each other, she knows I am interested in her. However, she did not even talked to me. She spent all the time with her girl friends and her mother. I did not know what to do. I just said nothing. I kept my mouth shut the whole time. I am not sure she likes me or she is a bit shy. My question is... Who acted bad? Was it me or her?

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We went out, she (it's better to put a name instead of a pronoun here) , her mother, a friend, a girl, a guy and I. We headed to a beach 5 miles from the city. This was supposed to be the mean s by which we could get to know each other, (comma splice!

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  • We went out, she (it's better to put a name instead of a pronoun here) , her mother, a friend, a girl, a guy and I.
  • We headed to a beach 5 miles from the city.
  • This was supposed to be the mean s by which we could get to know each other, (comma splice!
  • ) she knows I am interested in her.
  • However, she did not even talk to me.
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We went out, she (it's better to put a name instead of a pronoun here), her mother, a friend, a girl, a guy and I. We headed to a beach 5 miles from the city. This was supposed to be the means by which we could get to know each other, (comma splice! Put a connecting word here.) she knows I am interested in her. However, she did not even talk to me. She spent all the tim
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