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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Which word and sentence option i sa better choice?

Which word and sentence option is a better and clearer choice? FYI- Palin is the young wizard and Tanin and Sturm are his brothers.
1. At the beginning of the Chaos War in 383 AC, Palin and his brothers were part of a contingent of Knights of Solamnia that battled an invading force of Knights of Takhisis and Tarmak warriors at Thoradin Bay. Tanin and Sturm were killed while defending Palin during the fighting/fight, and afterward the young wizard was taken prisoner.

2. At the beginning of the Chaos War in 383 AC, Palin and his brothers were part of a contingent of Knights of Solamnia that battled an invading force of Knights of Takhisis and Tarmak warriors at Thoradin Bay. Tanin and Sturm were killed while defending Palin during the fighting/fight, and after the Solamnics were defeated, the young wizard was taken prisoner.
  

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Your second sentence provides some extra information, so I'd choose that one. I think fighting gives the impression of a battle that lasted a while (use it).

  • Your second sentence provides some extra information, so I'd choose that one.
  • I think fighting gives the impression of a battle that lasted a while (use it).
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Your second sentence provides some extra information, so I'd choose that one. I think fighting gives the impression of a battle that lasted a while (use it).

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