which sentence is correct! how do i correct it which one to use??????????

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Clive · Accepted Answer

0Hi,02br
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00#1 has errors and #2 doesn't. 02br
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00I believe #2 is the sentence I recommended to you earlier, isn't it?02br
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00Best wishes, Clive0-

Feebs11 · Answer

0Furthermore, 01del~~00both02del~~00 young people and adults spend much of their time playing online games and visiting chat rooms, both of which are time investments that ultimately result in student01font00s 02font00receiving poor grades and in adult01font00s02font00 losing their jobs.02br
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00Two × "both" in one sentence is bad English.02br
00students and adults do not need an apostrophe in this sentence.0-

Clive · Answer

0Hi,02br
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01font00Furthermore, 01del~~00both02del~~00 young people and adults spend much of their time playing online games and visiting02font00 01font00chat rooms, both of which are time investments that ultimately result in students receiving poor grades and in adults losing their jobs.02font02br
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01font00Two × "both" in one sentence is bad English.02font00 I'd say this kind of thing is a matter of style, and in this case my preference is to repeat 'both' in order to give the sentence more balance.02br
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01font00students and adults do not need an apostrophe in this sentence.01font00 02font02font00I wouldn't say it's wrong to omit the apostophes, and it's true that they would probably be usually omitted, but again it's a matter of style. 02br
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01font00Compare 'The accident resulted in Tom breaking his leg' vs. 'The accident resulted in Tom01font00's 02font00breaking his leg'. Some people would also argue that the apostrophe is required, on the grounds that the result is not 'Tom' but the 'breaking'.02font02br
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01font00Best wishes, Clive05002br
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