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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
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Which option is the better choice?

1. Not only did Sturm finally become a knight, he also was named the commander of the Crown Knights who were part of the Solamnic force that was being sent to Solamnia to battle the dragonarmies.

2. Not only did Sturm finally become a knight, he also was named the commander of the Crown Knights among the Solamnic force that was being sent to Solamnia to battle the dragonarmies.
  

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Not only did Sturm finally become a knight, but he was also named the commander of . . Now that the comma splice has been fixed, I think I would go with #1.

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  • Now that the comma splice has been fixed, I think I would go with #1.
  • It seems clearer to me.
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Not only did Sturm finally become a knight, but he was also named the commander of . . .


Now that the comma splice has been fixed, I think I would go with #1. It seems clearer to me.

"He was also named" sounds more natural than "he also was named."
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