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Ben9108 Posted 20 years ago
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The following paragraph is a part of my application letter. It has been commented by two interviewers. Up to this moment, i cannot find the problem from where. Have anyone help me?
"For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field. I would like to success your business if future great cooperation can be achieved. I look forward to being granted an interview, when I shall be glad to explain myself to you more detail. "
"For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field. I would like to success your business if future great cooperation can be achieved. I look forward to being granted an interview, when I shall be glad to explain myself to you more detail. "
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hello! some thoughts.. 1) i would like to succeed in your business especially when cooperation is acheived?
- hello!
- some thoughts..
- 1) i would like to succeed in your business especially when cooperation is acheived?
- is this what you mean?
- 2) im looking forward for an interview wherein i can give you full details of my qualifications
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hello!
some thoughts..
1) i would like to succeed in your business especially when cooperation is acheived? is this what you mean?
2) im looking forward for an interview wherein i can give you full details of my qualifications
some thoughts..
1) i would like to succeed in your business especially when cooperation is acheived? is this what you mean?
2) im looking forward for an interview wherein i can give you full details of my qualifications
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Ben9108The following paragraph is a part of my application letter. It has been commented by two interviewers. Up to this moment, i cannot find the problem from where. Have anyone help me?
"For the whole, I enclosed herewith my resume for your kind consideration and I hope my solid experience would properly help myself to develop my career in this field. I would l
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Tag's suggestions are good - but watch the spellings. You are tying yourself up in knots trying to sound too 'clever' - stick to expressing yourself clearly and simply for a better impression.
"For the whole (meaninless)
I enclose my resume for your consideration. I believe my solid experience (would properly help myself to devel
"For the whole (meaninless)
I enclose my resume for your consideration. I believe my solid experience (would properly help myself to devel
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