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Jackson6612 Posted 19 years ago
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when i look forward i see a world ...

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00Most of the time when I look forward in my furture I see a world of challenges. But my past always looks to me a sea of pleasant memories although there have been many bad memories also. Almost everyone around me has changed into a hypocrite even people who were very nice some years ago. Whenever I look towards the stars I feel so comfortable that I can't explain. Almost every night I look at those stars, they are kind of friends to me. I have tried to paraphrase my above experience in the following paragraph. Please check it for grammatical and punctuation mistakes. You can substitute more suitable words, like I said 01i00world02i00 of pleasant memories, so, if you feel you can add 01i00sea02i00 of pleasant memories etc. You can make any kind of addtion to the following paragraph. Thank you.02br
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01b00When I look forward I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories, when I look to myself I see a grown up man, and, when I see toward people around me they all have changed, and, when I see above toward the stars they appear the same as they were in my childhood, and, when I see the last day of my life I see a man dying in his bed and watching those stars because they are the ones which have never changed and perhaps they never will even after I die, so, I wish I become a part of them so that I will never change again neither will my fellow stars around me.02b0-
  

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02br 02br 00When I look 01b 00forwards02b 00 I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories 01b 00and 02b 00when I look to myself I see a grown man. (grown up is a childish expression). When 01b 00I look at the02b 00 people around me they all have changed01b 00 but02b 00 when I look above 01b 00towards02b 00 the stars they appear the same as they were in my childhood.

  • 02br 02br 00When I look 01b 00forwards02b 00 I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories 01b 00and 02b 00when I look to myself I see a grown man.
  • (grown up is a childish expression).
  • When 01b 00I look at the02b 00 people around me they all have changed01b 00 but02b 00 when I look above 01b 00towards02b 00 the stars they appear the same as they were in my childhood.
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00When I look 01b00forwards02b00 I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories 01b00and 02b00when I look to myself I see a grown man. (grown up is a childish expression). When 01b00I look at the02b00 people around me they all have chang
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01b01font00When I look forwards I see a world of challenges, when I look back I see a world of pleasant memories and when I look to myself I see a grown man. When I look at the people around me they all have changed but when I look above towards the stars they appear the same as t
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