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Mango pen 189 Posted 5 years ago
Grammar

When doing/while doing

A- When invading, the direction of the host will appear on your compass at the top of your screen.

B- The new item allows you to respawn nearby wherever the host is and was likely put in the game as a way to mitigate the sheer scope of the open world and the potential frustration that could come with that while invading.

(These two quotes are from a video explaining the new adjustment of an upcoming video game.)


Are these sentences grammatically correct? especially the use of "when/while invading"

  

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mango pen 189 Are these sentences grammatically correct? They could be better. mango pen 189 A- When invading, the direction of the host will appear on your compass at the top of your screen.

— Anonymous

  • mango pen 189 Are these sentences grammatically correct?
  • They could be better.
  • mango pen 189 A- When invading, the direction of the host will appear on your compass at the top of your screen.
  • "When invading" is a dangler.
  • It says that the direction is invading, but "direction of the host" borders on meaninglessness, so I can't suggest a revision.
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mango pen 189Are these sentences grammatically correct?

They could be better.

mango pen 189A- When invading, the direction of the host will appear on your compass at the top of your screen.

"When invading" is a dangler. It says that the direction is invading, but "direction of the host" borders on meaninglessness,

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