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Guest Posted 22 years ago
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What is wrong with this sentence?
I can't figure out what is wrong with this sentence!
Control of asthma in children under five of age may prevent worsening of symptoms and permanent obstructive disease in adulthood.
Do I need to put YEARS after five?
Do I need to change the word WORSENING?
Thanks.
Control of asthma in children under five of age may prevent worsening of symptoms and permanent obstructive disease in adulthood.
Do I need to put YEARS after five?
Do I need to change the word WORSENING?
Thanks.
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I would revise it as: Controlling asthma in children under five may prevent worsening of symptoms and permanent obstructive disease in adulthood.
- I would revise it as: Controlling asthma in children under five may prevent worsening of symptoms and permanent obstructive disease in adulthood.
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I would revise it as:
Controlling asthma in children under five may prevent worsening of symptoms and permanent obstructive disease in adulthood.
Controlling asthma in children under five may prevent worsening of symptoms and permanent obstructive disease in adulthood.
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The sentence is comletely clear as Dave rewrote it, but if you still would like to use the word "years", the whole phrase "years of age" is better:
"Controlling asthma in children under five years of age may prevent worsening of symptoms and permanent obstructive disease in adulthood."
"Controlling asthma in children under five years of age may prevent worsening of symptoms and permanent obstructive disease in adulthood."
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