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"Success The Easy Way" vs "The Easy Way to Success"

"Methods of Attack and Causing Harm" vs "Methods of Attack and Damages"

"It makes no difference whether it is an online strategy, online communications, social media or, more recently, mobile communication that is being implemented." vs
"It makes no difference whether an online strategy, online communications, social media or – more recently – mobile communication is implemented."

"It should be noted that an increasing complexity in the method of attack from a remote point guarantees more certitude not be brought to light and anonymity for the attacker when he commits a white-collar crime in the field of IT." vs
"It should be noted that an increasing complexity in the method of attack from a remote point of attack comes with more security and anonymity for the attacker when it comes to white-collar crime in IT."

Thanks alot.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

"Success The Easy Way" vs "The Easy Way to Success" - either one will be accepted as a title.

"It makes no difference whether it is an online strategy, online communications, social media or, more recently, mobile communication that is being implemented." vs
"It makes no difference whether an online strategy, online communications, social media or – more recently – mobile communication is implemented."

Are you asking about the punctuation, the verb form, or the sentence structure? Are these your only options?

"It should be noted that an increasing complexity in the method of attack from a remote point guarantees more certitude not be brought to light and anonymity for the attacker when he commits a white-collar crime in the field of IT."
The previous sentence is incomprehensible.

"It should be noted that an increasing complexity in the method of attack from a remote point of attack comes with more security and anonymity for the attacker when it comes to white-collar crime in IT."
This one is more understandable, but still needs a lot of revision.

Mister Micawber · Answer

Hello, Mbxxx—and welcome to English Forums.

"Success The Easy Way" vs "The Easy Way to Success"- Both are OK

"Methods of Attack and Causing Harm" vs "Methods of Attack and Injury"-- I'd choose the latter.

"It makes no difference whether it is an online strategy, online communications, social media or, more recently, mobile communication that is being implemented." vs
"It makes no difference whether an online strategy, online communications, social media or – more recently – mobile communication is implemented."- Both are OK

It should be noted that an increasingly complex attack from a remote point guarantees more secrecy and anonymity for the attacker when he commits a white-collar IT crime.-- Use this; your others are too verbose.

Mbxxx · Answer

It should be noted that an increasingly complex attack from a remote point guarantees more secrecy and anonymity for the attacker when he commits a white-collar IT crime.-- Use this; your others are too verbose.

=> But that means something different ?

secrecy != security. I mean, that when the method of attack gets more complex from a remote point, the attacker gains more security (tech. not getting traced) and anonymity in the white-collar crime in IT.

+ Causing Harm / Damage..
when a hacker hacks a page..

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Mbxxx=> But that means something different ?

It has the same meaning as what you wrote, but is much clearer.

Something that is more secret is harder to trace.
It overlaps the meaning of anonymity: (the identity of the sender is difficult to perceive.)

Security is used for the systems being protected against such attacks.

Mbxxx · Answer

some more

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In correlation to this case, it can be said that when Internet brands are established once, it isimpossible to compromise their position. Nevertheless, if this occured, this would cause either an innovation in competition or severe damage of the brand. White-collar crime on the Internet is not only a criminal offense where data spying or service interruptions are the aim; it can also pose a direct threat to the sustainability of a business. It is treated as anattack vector on the competition.
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The case is even more complex where there is a remote attacker.
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Regardless of the immediate damage that occurs, more damage is brought about the following irreparable harm to one’s reputation as a result...
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may cause an Internet service or the provision thereof to be limited
vs may cause an Internet service or the deployment thereof to be limited
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Often, they are unaware of the kind of damage being caused and pursue material motives only secondarily.
vs Often, he is unaware of the kind of damage being inflicted and pursues merely secondary material motives.
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It is worth noting that the estimated number of unknown cases of all offenses is significantly higher.
vs It is worth noting that the underreporting of all offenses is significantly higher than it should be.
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The portals were back online after eight days. vs
he portals were back online eight days later.
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That a medium is attacked cannot prove with certainty how calls or sales would have evolved without an unexpected outage.
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That´s all; sorry for so much text. Are these correct or what version is considered better. Thanks alot.

Mbxxx · Answer

Great, thanks so far.

Mbxxx · Answer

Any more comments ? Please....

AlpheccaStars · Answer

The English is not very natural in many of these sentences. Some are OK, but others are difficult to decipher.
I'm not sure what to do with it.

Is this an essay on criminal activity on the Internet?

Mbxxx · Answer

Yes!. Let me know which are ok and which cause problems. I try to explain then. Thanks alot.

Mbxxx · Answer

And the last onces.
I think there is something missing in the sentences.

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Despite the changes with respect to convict a perpetrator it is most times a matter of pure luck.
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Essentially, only in the rarest cases, there is any basic IT knowledge, and as a consequence, the presentation of evidence cannot be judged or even deliberately ignored.
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At the same time, the grade of monitoring employees and surveillance of a company is limited by law.
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On the one hand, you have to protect individual privacy, but on the other hand, privacy is de facto the means for obstructing justice in identifying perpetrators.
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