What do you think about my application for Master programme?

So here is my application. I would really appreciate it if anyone could give me some advice on that:

Letter of motivation for Master in Advanced Product Design

Dear Committee Members,

since I can remember I always used to be a person who enjoyed creative activities. At the age of 13 I went to a free art school, where I was the youngest participant in that course, at high school (Gymnasium) students used to categorize me as "the artist". Though my intention was never just to create anything but to create something with meaning and a purpose. In 2013 I pursued this goal by starting my studies in product design at FH XXXXX University Of Applied Sciences in Germany. I soon realized that my favourite field of the offered courses was industrial design. So I started to choose courses which where most related to that field like the pedelec or kick scooter project, which were supervised by Mxxxxxx Wxxxxx, a lecturer with a reputable design agency and design experience at frog design. Also with the choice of my abroad studies last semester and the choice of my internship I intended to broaden my knowledge in that field. During my abroad studies in Malaysia I had the opportunity to be taught by lecturers with an educational background from the UK, Australia and Germany. The project "Vetro" was supervised by lecturers, who worked for Nike and Proton, the most common automotive brand in Malaysia. Through the new experiences during the past year I could improve my sketching skills and learn more about how to create products that solve problems, human- centred design and marketing.
Creating products, which focusses on humans, their needs, motivations, feelings and experiences enables to create emotionally and functional meaningful products. It is part of the holistic product design process of your programme and one of the reasons I would like to participate in it. I am curious about learning more about creating a product due to a design strategy for example regarding human- centred design and creating products that fit a certain brand.
Furthermore it is an important aspect that the Master in Advanced Product Design prepares one pretty well for working life. Projects vary from individual and group work and often they are part of a cooperation with renown companies such as Philips, Smart Design, Atlas Copco, Nokia and many more. This is also appreciated by a lot of design agencies and companies, potential future employers.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Mxxxxxx Rxxxx