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Poleshka Posted 17 years ago
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What do you thing about my personal statement?does it sound ok?
Studying foundation in Art and Design gave me a significant indication of what path I want to follow in the future. My original direction was towards fashion design, but after working in 3D and experimenting with materials, I discovered that my real interest was Jewellery design.
It has always been my ambition to study abroad, coming from a small town in Poland to a big cosmopolitan city like opened my mind to new, different and excited opportunities. I have met and worked in a team with people from an array of different backgrounds and cultures. It is the people who have inspire me. Those who achieve their goals and I am one of those people. My future goal is to work in the design industry and I can see myself working in a team of people learning about all aspects of design industry.
I find designers such as Stuart Haygarth interesting and I am fascinated by the way he takes everyday objects and transforms them into beautiful and unique lighting. I also admire fashion/textile designer Hussain Chalayan and Richard Sweeney.
My favourite materials to work with are white paper and various fabrics I enjoy their textural qualities and the spectrum of colours.
We were given a flat-pack project I used A2 sheets of paper ,plain in colour, created circular shapes which were cut and folded to create a three dimensional interlocking neckpiece. The apparently simple appearance belies the more complex approach.
I believe I can attain highly on this course and it will give me the opportunity to express my ideas and creativity further. I will succeed due to my passion for the subject and willingness to succeed as a designer of the future.
It has always been my ambition to study abroad, coming from a small town in Poland to a big cosmopolitan city like opened my mind to new, different and excited opportunities. I have met and worked in a team with people from an array of different backgrounds and cultures. It is the people who have inspire me. Those who achieve their goals and I am one of those people. My future goal is to work in the design industry and I can see myself working in a team of people learning about all aspects of design industry.
I find designers such as Stuart Haygarth interesting and I am fascinated by the way he takes everyday objects and transforms them into beautiful and unique lighting. I also admire fashion/textile designer Hussain Chalayan and Richard Sweeney.
My favourite materials to work with are white paper and various fabrics I enjoy their textural qualities and the spectrum of colours.
We were given a flat-pack project I used A2 sheets of paper ,plain in colour, created circular shapes which were cut and folded to create a three dimensional interlocking neckpiece. The apparently simple appearance belies the more complex approach.
I believe I can attain highly on this course and it will give me the opportunity to express my ideas and creativity further. I will succeed due to my passion for the subject and willingness to succeed as a designer of the future.
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Poleshka: It is good, but you might want to think about a more logical flow of ideas. There are also some minor grammatical mistakes. I have given some suggestions below..
- Poleshka: It is good, but you might want to think about a more logical flow of ideas.
- There are also some minor grammatical mistakes.
- I have given some suggestions below..
- Poleshka Studying foundation in Art and Design (is "Foundation in Art and Design" the name of a course?
- If not, it should be "the foundations of art and design " ) gave me a significant indication (a bit awkward - maybe - led me towards the path ) of what path I want to follow in the future.
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Poleshka: It is good, but you might want to think about a more logical flow of ideas. There are also some minor grammatical mistakes. I have given some suggestions below..
PoleshkaStudying foundation in Art and Design (is "Foundation in Art and Design" the name of a course? If not, it should be "the foundations of art and design" ) gave me a significant indic
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