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Contiluo Posted 12 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

wasted resources

Is the general idea of the paragraph up to the standard of unity, continuity, coherence? Please help me correct it. Thanks!

There are a number of reasons to use disposable chopsticks. First, they are useful in food service. Next, they are sometimes handy for individual consumers. Third, they usually come in a sheath of plastic or paper for hygienic reasons to reduce the transfer of bacteria and dirt to the chopsticks. Consequently, disposable chopsticks have long been preferred for their convenience and sanitation, and they are in high demand in carry-out restaurants and noodle shops, fast-food eateries and snack stands. But the wasted resources caused by their overuse cannot be ignored.
  

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It still needs work. After each of the 3 reasons why one should use disposible chopsticks, you give no support for your statement. How are they useful in food service?

  • It still needs work.
  • After each of the 3 reasons why one should use disposible chopsticks, you give no support for your statement.
  • How are they useful in food service?
  • How are they handy for customers (not consumers)?
  • Your final sentence doesn't belong in the paragraph because you haven't spoken about wasted resources or their overuse.
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It still needs work. After each of the 3 reasons why one should use disposible chopsticks, you give no support for your statement. How are they useful in food service? How are they handy for customers (not consumers)? Your final sentence doesn't belong in the paragraph because you haven't spoken about wasted resources or their overuse.

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