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Stevenukd Posted 19 years ago
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VIOLENCE FILMS

0Dear Teachers,02br
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0Hi,02br 02br 01font 00- The violence in flims really influences on young people. Because if young people watch too many violence films, they will imitate to do the actions in the films and practice in real life, and they gradually can become real dangerous criminals. 02font 02br 02br 00- The violence in films really influences young people.

— Clive

  • 0Hi,02br 02br 01font 00- The violence in flims really influences on young people.
  • Because if young people watch too many violence films, they will imitate to do the actions in the films and practice in real life, and they gradually can become real dangerous criminals.
  • 02font 02br 02br 00- The violence in films really influences young people.
  • If they watch too many violent films, they will imitate the actions in the films and practice them in real life, and they gradually can become really dangerous criminals.
  • That's why parents should help their children stay away from these films, and teach them what is wrong or right.
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0Hi,02br
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01font00- The violence in flims really influences on young people. Because if young people watch too many violence films, they will imitate to do the actions in the films and practice in real life, and they gradually can become real dangerous criminals. That's why parents should help their children stay away from them and teach them wha
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0 01font00I think that could be improved even further. Maybe something like the following:02br
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00Violence02b02font00 in films really influences young people. If they watch too many violent films, they 01font01b00may02b02font00 imitate the actions in
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0Hi Bokeh,02br
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00Here are some comments from someone who both proofreads and edits (and has her work edited and proofread):02br
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00You moved from being a 01i00proofreader 02i00and simply fixing errors to being an 01i00editor 02i00and changing the wording. 02br
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00You also made a
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01cite10Grammar Geek12cite10Here are some comments from someone who both proofreads and edits12br
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10I proofread too but fortunately for me they are translated texts (from Spanish to English) so in a case like this I can always look at the source material to ascertain the intended meaning. 0-
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01cite10Bokeh12cite11font11b10 For this reason parent12b12font10s should 11font11b10attempt to12b10 keep their children away12font10 from these films, and to 11font11b10teach them ri
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1font00Hi,02font02br
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01b01font00For this reason parent02font02b00s should 01font01b00attempt to02b00 keep their children away02font00 from these films, and 01del00to02del00 01font
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0 Thanks, Clive. I agree with you. 0-
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