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It is no doubt that children nowadays spend time on playing video whenever they get time.. Some parents see that it is a wasteful time activities while others think that video games can give some positive effect.
The undeniable usefulness of video is helping children relax after their stresful studying time at school or at home. Though for the parents who want their kids to be more active and take physical actiities to develop their body instead of just lying on the bed playing game , video games are a kind of unhealthy activity. Moever, they believe that video games consist of violent content which can harm their children's moral.
Video playing time should be replaced by reasonable activities such as: playing outdoor, walking dogs , play sport or doing physical exercises. These activities can engage family member together as well as strengthen children' body.
In conclusion, I think video games only have bad impacts on children if parents allow them to spend too much time on them. It can be still an ideal family activities in spare time
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