Usng non-restrictive clauses within non-restrictive clauses?

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Is it acceptable to put a non-restrictive phrase within another one or to use a sequence of them? Or is it recommended to just recast the sentence?

Using a sequence of them:
"Many construction workers are at risk of inhaling silica dust, which can lead to silicosis, a type of respiratory disease."

"Intestacy, where the deceased did not make a Will and therefore has no say in what happens to their estate, leaving it instead to be shared out in accordance with certain rules, is a situation many would rather avoid."

One within another:
"He ran into Mrs. Potts, the nice old lady who used to take his dog, a Jack Russell named Skipper, for daytime walks while he was at work, and stopped to say hello."

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

JJDouglasMany construction workers are at risk of inhaling silica dust, which can lead to silicosis, a type of respiratory disease.

That is OK.

JJDouglasIntestacy, where the deceased did not make a Will and therefore has no say in what happens to their estate, leaving it instead to be shared out in accordance with certain rules, is a situation many would rather avoid."

That is OK.

JJDouglas"He ran into Mrs. Potts, the nice old lady who used to take his dog, a Jack Russell named Skipper, for daytime walks while he was at work, and stopped to say hello."

That's too much. Recast.

JJDouglas · Answer

Thank you for the reply.

Mister MicawberThat's too much. Recast.

Would simply making the the last phrase, where the main clause resumes after the non-restrictive phrase, its own sentence help?

"He ran into Mrs. Potts, the nice old lady who used to take his dog, a Jack Russell named Skipper, for daytime walks while he was at work. He stopped to say hello."

Anonymous · Answer

JJDouglas"Intestacy, where the deceased did not make a Will and therefore has no say in what happens to their estate, leaving it instead to be shared out in accordance with certain rules, is a situation many would rather avoid."

How come that the deceased are still active by having no say well after their death?

Mister Micawber · Answer

If they are dead, they have no say. What is your point?

Mister Micawber · Answer

I think the clause is still too far split, JJ.  Try for effective communication, not stretching the limits of composition.

JJDouglas · Answer

Mister MicawberTry for effective communication, not stretching the limits of composition.

Point taken

It's because I'm trying to make sure I understand all the rules of punctuation – and what you can and can't do – that I'll sometimes try to construct needlessly complex sentences to see how far the rules of punctuation apply.

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