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Cogar Posted 19 years ago
Grammar

use of semi colon

0hello all,02br
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00is the use of semi colon and "for" appropriate in the sentence below? How can i make it more concise? Thanks alot!02br
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00Advised clients on business strategy00; 00designed solutions 00for 00and pitched proposals to clients 0-
  

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0Hi,02br 02br 01font 00is the use of semi colon and "for" appropriate in the sentence below? How can i make it more concise? 02font 02br 02br 01font 00Advised clients on business strategy00; 00designed solutions 00for 00and pitched proposals to clients 02font 02br 02br 00This is obviously in point-form, which is fine for this type of writing.

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  • 0Hi,02br 02br 01font 00is the use of semi colon and "for" appropriate in the sentence below?
  • How can i make it more concise?
  • 02font 02br 02br 01font 00Advised clients on business strategy00; 00designed solutions 00for 00and pitched proposals to clients 02font 02br 02br 00This is obviously in point-form, which is fine for this type of writing.
  • 00I suggest -02br 02br 01font 00Advised clients on business strategy.
  • 02font 02br 02br 01font 00or perhaps02br 02br 01font 00Advised clients on business strategy.
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0Hi,02br
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01font00is the use of semi colon and "for" appropriate in the sentence below? How can i make it more concise? Thanks a lot!02font02br
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01font00Advised clients on business strategy00; 00designed solutions 00for 00and pitched proposals to clients 02font
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0thanks mate. one more,02br
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00which is more elegant, "them" or "clients" at the end?02br
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01font00Advised clients on business strategy00 and00 pitched proposals to 00them/clients.02font0-
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0Hi,02br
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01font00which is more elegant, "them" or "clients" at the end?02font02br
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01font01font00Advised clients on business strategy00 and00 pitched proposals to 02font01font00them/clients02font00
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0in this case, is it clear that you pitched proposals to clients?02br
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00how about adding another verb,02br
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00Advised clients on business strategy, 00designed solutions00 and pitched proposals.02br
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00is it clear that you designed the solutions for clients, and pitched proposals to clients as well?02br
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0Hi,02br
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01font00in this case, is it clear that you pitched proposals to clients?02font00 I thought it might be understood from the context. Who else are you likely to pitch proposals to?02br
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01font00how about adding another verb,02font02br
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0I prefer "01font00Advised clients on business strategy, designed solutions and pitched proposals02font00." because I feel that "01font00Worked with clients to advise on business strategy, design solutions and pitch proposals02font00" is not very clear in explaining that I am advising clients on strategy. A
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