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Lie

I didn’t know, until February 27, 2005, Why did God create and continously creating an element of human nature that could deviates and pervert from the truth? It is called lie. Lie does not have a pair of eye, a mouth, a nose nor facial feathers, but it is devilest part of human soul that is frequently practiced by everybody who lives in this planet. And with lie being called devilest part of human soul, I must question to God, why would God give each of us this devilest human nature? And I must question, why would people get punished for lying? Everyday we are being punished for using this unerasable attachment that God gave to us. I define lie as a devil element that existed inside a soul of a human because lie could consequently intensify a resolvable conflict, lie hurts soul of whoever listened to it and lie cheated honesty and integrity of everyone who involved to the lie. Throughout my nineteen years of life, I developed from a pro-lie person to an anti-lie person. I rather to hear a fact that can lead me to a fatal heart-attack than hear lie that tastes like an apple pie.

Recall my childhood life, I loved to lie. In another word, I hate the me in my childhood, especially when my mouth opens. I lived cheerfully through the world of lies until later, I noticed from punishment my mother conducted when I lie, lie is a devil. I lied to my mother I ate the tuna sandwich which she made me for lunch after I threw and buried it to the bottom of the trash can outside of my classroom. I lied to my mother I learned Algebric function and Algebric graphing after I ditched the class and went to a game arcade instead. I lied to my mother I spent three bucks at lunch after I used the three bucks she gave me to bought a Marlboro lights. “You could lie to me, but you couldn’t lie to the truth. Lie only hurts yourself.” Said my mother, then a spank on my hand followed. I was shocked and I pondered how could she know what did I really do with the resources she gave me? “Of course I knew what did when I see you ate four burgers during dinner, 4 straight F’s on your report card and smell the disgusting odor of cigarette.” Despite how sensitive my mother was to my behaviors, I kept lying. And of course, as a consequence of lying, I deserved punishment. However; children rarely focus on their moral and conduct when they are children. Why? Perhaps people always forgive their childish actions because of their immaturity, so I was forgiven for the lies I told. But as I grew older, I was never forgiven for the lies I told.

Despite being terrorized by mother’s harsh punishment, hand spank, I did not quit the habit of lying. I liked to lie, until the day I wasn’t forgiven for telling my lie. On an October of my high school sophomore year, I was disciplinarily suspended by Mr. Davis, my high school vice principal who was in charge of student discipline, for fighting. I lied to Mr. Davis that Jose smacked my face because I teased him during physical education class. “No, Eric, you are lying, you lied that Jose smacked you but you actually smacked his face and spit on his face, is that correct?” Now I realized I was totally wrong that I lied and even more wrong that I lied to an ex-cop, Mr. Davis. “If you told us the truth of why you punched Jose’s face, the worst punishment you really gonna got was merely two consecutive Saturaday schools rather than suspend you from attending school for three days.” What happened? I questioned to my self why I wasn’t forgiven for lying? Of course, I was so called a semi-adult when that happened. I regretted that I was punished for lying to a resolvable conflict. Indeed, Mr. Davis was famed for being clever and honest, he imposed a harsher punishment to me because I challenged to both of what he was famed for. As a result, I was subdued.

Not until I graduated from Rowland high school and started attend Santa Monica College, I quitted this malicious habit. Started on my sophomore year of college, I felt like earning $6.75 at places such as McDonald, Burger King, Taco Bell does represent the talent which I think I possess. Therefore, I started my online business- women accessory retail business, I opened an account on Ebay.com, world’s largest online marketplace. As I opened my women accessory retail business on Ebay.com, I formally admitted to the world of business, regardless of tangible or intangible. I had fun of selling women accesorries, I had fun of selling a pair metal ear ring that I bought for $1.00 at downtown’s gourmet district and sold it for $9.99 on Ebay.com, I had fun of earning profit that is multiple amount of what I invested to stock my inventory, I had fun of be a “CEO” of my “Eric’s Women Boutique,” and I had fun of researching the fashion demand of trendy female. I was a cheerful seller until one day, about three weeks ago, I received tons of chargeback inquiry from the fradulent buyers. I called them fradulent buyers because they lied. I must admit that majority of my buyers are honest, moral and cooperative, however; there are always immoral buyers who loved to lie to me, loved lie to their credit card company, and loved lie to Ebay.com. “I did not receive this lamp leather glove that I purchased on Ebay.com, I would like to stop the payment on this transaction.” I imaged this is how those fradulent buyers claimed. I imaged they were wearing this soft pair of lamp leather glove when they were stopping their payment to me, regardless of how harsh would blazes hurt their hands if they wore off my lamp glove. How am I being protected from those fradulent buyer? Nothing, all I could do was to curse and imaging how would I ripe off my lamp glove from their hand if I see them. They cheated their honesty, their soul and their integrity.

And to whoever that listened to lies, they hurt. Now I understood why I was punished for lying; I hurt everyone that listened to my lie. Perhaps lie takes precedence of real needs than honesty and regardless of calling lie a devil, we continued to lie. When we take an overall look to the history of human, ever since the existence of ape, there are countless intensified conflicts that are resulted from lying , unsolved conflicts hurt and cheated billions of lifes. As lie keeps intensify, hurt and cheat, this devil continues its existence in the world.