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Vincent tee Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing
Urgent! Please revise this letter for my new employer.
0 Hi English Forum Tutors. 02 br
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00 I'm a fresh graduate with 1 year experience. I would like you to check on my grammar and is there anything I need to add or extract from the letter below. This letter will be forwarded to my new employer. Thank you so much for your help. 02 br
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01 font 00 Dear Tim Garland & Wendy Luc, 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Web Programmer with you. Our meeting helped me to better understand your company’s goals and reaffirmed my belief that this is the organization I would like to work for. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Although I’m ranked second among the three candidates, I would like you to reconsider about my application again to be the right person you would like to hire and at the same time giving me a chance to work as a long term employee, not just to benefit the development team but also the company. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 I made some mistakes by showing too much of Front End Materials in the interview as I’ve the experience in Back End Programming Knowledge too which I didn’t show. With all that, I could clearly see that you doubt if I were the right candidate your organization is looking for. To reaffirm your confidence, I came from a programming background and from a Programming College, APIIT and I’ve done a prototype E-Commerce system for my Final Year Project using ASP, VB Script, SQL and DBMS. The project was a success, but not only that, I’ve integrated multimedia elements with Back End Programming Languages and a properly designed web layout to make it as a whole package of an E-Commerce System. The project is available to be shown if you would like to invite me for a 2 01 sup 00 nd 02 sup 00 interview. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As I’m a fast and a self learner, I would say I could easily pick up any Programming Languages and learn them in a fast pace. 2-3 weeks will be needed for my refresh, by that time the hiring processes (signing offer letter, medical report, HR processing, etc) will take longer than that, so I’ve retrained myself to accomplish your work and am capable to handle the job as per your requirements and lead Your Company to success. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 I’m a hardworking, someone with a sense of humor, a competent young man, have the ability to product, a self learner and easily mix around with new people. I would say its better to think for a long term employee instead of a short term. Don’t you want to hire somebody like this? 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As I’ve seen in the interview, I would like to say I love the group of people and have the enthusiasm to work with them. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Since I’m eagerly looking for a job because I have to pay up my mortgage, it would be appreciate if you guys to help me up and reconsider my application. I don’t mind to start with a lower salary that you’ve decided to pay for the first candidate. I hope to hear from you soon, and would be pleased to meet with you again for another interview. 02 br
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00 Sincerely, 02 br
00 Vincent 02 font 0-
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00 I'm a fresh graduate with 1 year experience. I would like you to check on my grammar and is there anything I need to add or extract from the letter below. This letter will be forwarded to my new employer. Thank you so much for your help. 02 br
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01 font 00 Dear Tim Garland & Wendy Luc, 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Web Programmer with you. Our meeting helped me to better understand your company’s goals and reaffirmed my belief that this is the organization I would like to work for. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Although I’m ranked second among the three candidates, I would like you to reconsider about my application again to be the right person you would like to hire and at the same time giving me a chance to work as a long term employee, not just to benefit the development team but also the company. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 I made some mistakes by showing too much of Front End Materials in the interview as I’ve the experience in Back End Programming Knowledge too which I didn’t show. With all that, I could clearly see that you doubt if I were the right candidate your organization is looking for. To reaffirm your confidence, I came from a programming background and from a Programming College, APIIT and I’ve done a prototype E-Commerce system for my Final Year Project using ASP, VB Script, SQL and DBMS. The project was a success, but not only that, I’ve integrated multimedia elements with Back End Programming Languages and a properly designed web layout to make it as a whole package of an E-Commerce System. The project is available to be shown if you would like to invite me for a 2 01 sup 00 nd 02 sup 00 interview. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As I’m a fast and a self learner, I would say I could easily pick up any Programming Languages and learn them in a fast pace. 2-3 weeks will be needed for my refresh, by that time the hiring processes (signing offer letter, medical report, HR processing, etc) will take longer than that, so I’ve retrained myself to accomplish your work and am capable to handle the job as per your requirements and lead Your Company to success. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 I’m a hardworking, someone with a sense of humor, a competent young man, have the ability to product, a self learner and easily mix around with new people. I would say its better to think for a long term employee instead of a short term. Don’t you want to hire somebody like this? 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As I’ve seen in the interview, I would like to say I love the group of people and have the enthusiasm to work with them. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Since I’m eagerly looking for a job because I have to pay up my mortgage, it would be appreciate if you guys to help me up and reconsider my application. I don’t mind to start with a lower salary that you’ve decided to pay for the first candidate. I hope to hear from you soon, and would be pleased to meet with you again for another interview. 02 br
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00 Sincerely, 02 br
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0 Hi Vincent, 02 br 02 br 00 Here is your letter tidied up with any errors corrected: 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 Dear Tim Garland & Wendy Luc, 02 font 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Web Programmer with you. 02 font 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 Although I’m ranked second among the three candidates, I would like you to reconsider my application to be the person to hire and at the same time give me a chance to work as a long term employee, not just to benefit the development team, but also the company itself. ] 00 .
- 0 Hi Vincent, 02 br 02 br 00 Here is your letter tidied up with any errors corrected: 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 Dear Tim Garland & Wendy Luc, 02 font 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Web Programmer with you.
- 02 font 02 br 02 br 01 font 00 Although I’m ranked second among the three candidates, I would like you to reconsider my application to be the person to hire and at the same time give me a chance to work as a long term employee, not just to benefit the development team, but also the company itself.
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- Consequently I can understand that you doubt if I am the right candidate your organization is looking for.
- To confirm, I come from a programming background and from a Programming College, APIIT 00 [this only makes sense if APIIT is the name of the college] 00 and I successfully developed a prototype E-Commerce system for my Final Year Project using ASP, VB Script, SQL and DBMS.
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0 Hi Vincent, 02 br
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00 Here is your letter tidied up with any errors corrected: 02 br
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01 font 00 Dear Tim Garland & Wendy Luc, 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Web Programmer with you. Our meeting helped me to better understand
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00 Here is your letter tidied up with any errors corrected: 02 br
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01 font 00 Dear Tim Garland & Wendy Luc, 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Thank you for the opportunity to discuss the position of Web Programmer with you. Our meeting helped me to better understand
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