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Gary lee Posted 21 years ago
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Urgent Message. Could teachers from this forum help?

This is a very important message need to be sent to my supervisor. Could someone please kindly check my English grammar and structure problem. Thanks a million to this wonderul forum.!

I totally have no idea why Intel activities had brought up as an issue to my agency? From what I’ve heard from them it seems to be untrue. I need to defense myself and I’ve the right to say when a thing goes wrong. As far as I’ve concerned there are none of my projects being affected by those activities. In fact I’ve done a few of the projects using my extra time and with my home PC just to have them beautify to perfection. Am I right to be blamed?



In this case, I believe you’ve second guess Intel activities are the cause to my OT claim. Didn’t I tell you not to second guess? I wonder why you said this to Rebecca. (I’m just using a soft tone over here, so don’t get hurt. I totally respect you.)



She must be asking. Did you give Gary too many projects to handle?

Or

Why is he complaining about claiming his OT?

Or

He said he’s been working quite late since hired.

Or

None of above – might be other questions.



Without thinking further I think you’ve replied “maybe he’s been involving in too many Intel activities that made him work overtime or during off hours.” Why were Intel activities the main reason in your mind instead of others? Like, I think Gary has outside businesses or maybe he has double employment that affected his projects. My question is, why wouldn’t you ask me before you second guess? Why can’t you say I’m not sure what is happening, I’ll check out with Gary and I’ll let you know later? Why you gave Intel activities as a reason?...because you think so?



Rebecca was assuming the wrong thing but it was so true for her. I can’t blame her by her words because what she spoke was from you. Actually I had given Rebecca an instruction not to announce the OT claim to you till the right time as soon as I’ve made up my decision whether or not to request for it and she said Okay… but look what had happened? She seemed not to keep her words.



In fact I’m not sure who am I suppose to blame. But If I were to blame maybe I would blame all of us.

1st Rebecca = because she didn’t keep her promise

2nd You = because you second guess

3rd Myself = Maybe I shouldn’t have pop up this question



These are the true reason why I talk about the OT (I’m not sure if Rebecca repeat my words clear enough to you. Occasionally misunderstanding will occur if third party involved. That is why the best way of getting an exact answer is from me)



  1. I was asking about how does the OT procedure works

  2. I though of, Can I actually claim some of my OT since it is the agency’s money and not our department fund (for few days I can be sure that I’ve work overtime)

  3. I want more workload so that I can claim the OT


In fact my agency and I already had a slight dispute concerning my allowance claim. They didn’t promise what they’ve said earlier. I need to reason out, send tons of emails, phone calls just to have them to give me the allowance. Eventually they gave me. But why I suppose to do all these and wasted so much time since they’ve already promised? Isn’t this basic common sense?



The next thing of conversation she talked about was “Gary you need room for improvement”. This point was what she got from you too. Which is fine for me “I really need improvement”



I said what improvement. She said I can’t provide you an answer since this is private. Well if it is private please don’t say it out if you can’t provide me any good answer. Generally everyone knows ever body needs improvement even though the greatest man on earth. Right? After tough time pleading, eventually I got the answer “you need more innovative thinking.” L
  

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Hello gary lee, I have corrected a bit of your text, I frankly haven't got the time to correct everything. I'm sorry. Below you'll find the first part of the text and below that I put it the way I'd say it.

  • Hello gary lee, I have corrected a bit of your text, I frankly haven't got the time to correct everything.
  • I'm sorry.
  • Below you'll find the first part of the text and below that I put it the way I'd say it.
  • I totally have no idea why Intel activities had brought up as an issue to my agency?
  • From what I’ve heard from them it seems to be untrue.
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Hello gary lee,

I have corrected a bit of your text, I frankly haven't got the time to correct everything. I'm sorry. Below you'll find the first part of the text and below that I put it the way I'd say it.

I totally have no idea why Intel activities had br
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Hi,

Let me try the next section.

In this case, I believe you’ve second guess Intel activities are the cause to my OT claim. Didn’t I tell you not to second guess? I wonder why you said this to Rebecca. (I’m just using a soft tone over here, so don’t get hurt. I totally respect you.)

I sug

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