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Vincent tee Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing
Urgent Letter to HR - Grammar Check & Engish Sentences
0 Hi English Guru, I am pretty poor in English. Could someone please help to comment & refine my letter below to the HR in a more gently way of expressing? (grammar mistakes and restructuring of sentences) Many Thanks!! 02 br
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01 font 01 b 00 Dear Human Resource, 02 b 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Fist of all it is a great opportunity working for BAT for the past 2 years and thank you for considering my transition from the project team to support. There are few important points that I need to emphasize for your understanding. Actually, it isn’t important for BAT to review my current rate because RM6300 was an outdated 2 years ago charges and this rate was agreed to only within a specific job requirement however I have work way above these requirements. I would like to confer in order for both parties to reach a win-win agreement based on a conclusive justification. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 From my investigation, I have approached people who work in this particular industry (from a BW Project Manager, other BW Consultants and a headhunter) commenting my current rate as a contractor for BW Consultant specializing in Front End is really not at par with industry standard. On top of that from what I am working now is beyond the agreed job scope, providing services not only for 01 b 00 Programming 02 b 00 but also 01 b 00 BW Support 02 b 00 , 01 b 00 BW R&D Development 02 b 00 , 01 b 00 Graphics, Multimedia and also Training Management to all Asia Pacific regions. 00 02 b 00 I have contributed beyond the previous agreed job requirements for all BAT Projects yet my current employer dosen't know about this issue. These values contributing to the organization will determine that I am worth more than I should. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As a contractor, the company is not obligated to provide: 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As a contractor, we will have: 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As a contractor we will face: 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 I have fought for all project completion with success and met all datelines, sometimes till midnight yet no overtime charges being paid. Therefore, if the company were to bond my service for another one year or two, if the organization gives nothing but just low remuneration (a net pay) to the individual, what motivation is there to encourage the individual to give back to the organization more than the simple completion of allotted work? 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 About my accomplishment to BAT: 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 With all the justification mentioned above, I am looking for mutual benefits for both, BAT and myself. What BAT concern, is to pay my rate according to my skill set, 7 years of experience in IT sector and appropriate rate based industry standards for contractors and I will do my best to contribute my experience, talents, skills and abilities to the organization and the team. An appropriate market rate will be RM400 to RM500 per day or RM8,500 per month. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Yours Sincerely, 02 br
00 Vincent 02 font 0-
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01 font 01 b 00 Dear Human Resource, 02 b 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Fist of all it is a great opportunity working for BAT for the past 2 years and thank you for considering my transition from the project team to support. There are few important points that I need to emphasize for your understanding. Actually, it isn’t important for BAT to review my current rate because RM6300 was an outdated 2 years ago charges and this rate was agreed to only within a specific job requirement however I have work way above these requirements. I would like to confer in order for both parties to reach a win-win agreement based on a conclusive justification. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 From my investigation, I have approached people who work in this particular industry (from a BW Project Manager, other BW Consultants and a headhunter) commenting my current rate as a contractor for BW Consultant specializing in Front End is really not at par with industry standard. On top of that from what I am working now is beyond the agreed job scope, providing services not only for 01 b 00 Programming 02 b 00 but also 01 b 00 BW Support 02 b 00 , 01 b 00 BW R&D Development 02 b 00 , 01 b 00 Graphics, Multimedia and also Training Management to all Asia Pacific regions. 00 02 b 00 I have contributed beyond the previous agreed job requirements for all BAT Projects yet my current employer dosen't know about this issue. These values contributing to the organization will determine that I am worth more than I should. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As a contractor, the company is not obligated to provide: 02 font 02 br
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- 01 font 00 EPF and SOCSO 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Allowances 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Bonuses 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Medical / health benefits 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Loan / company stocks 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Training 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Family benefits 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Company insurance 02 font 01 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As a contractor, we will have: 02 font 02 br
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- 01 font 00 No chances of promotion availability 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 limited annual leaves 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 No Retirement saving plan 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 No Job security 02 font 01 font 02 br
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01 font 00 As a contractor we will face: 02 font 02 br
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- 01 font 00 Insecure job security 02 font 01 font 00 , no annual increment, promotion benefits 02 font 01 font 00 and as inflation 00 rises, every dollar we own buys a smaller percentage of a good or service. 02 font 01 font 02 br
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01 font 00 I have fought for all project completion with success and met all datelines, sometimes till midnight yet no overtime charges being paid. Therefore, if the company were to bond my service for another one year or two, if the organization gives nothing but just low remuneration (a net pay) to the individual, what motivation is there to encourage the individual to give back to the organization more than the simple completion of allotted work? 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 About my accomplishment to BAT: 02 font 02 br
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- 01 font 00 I have successfully completed 3 major projects for BAT (ASPAC MI, Japan FREE and AME) 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Since all ASPAC MI reports are running using web browser, I am one of the pioneers to develop all BW web reports for ASPAC MI, Japan FREE & AME Project in SAP Platform, therefore I have a strong technical skills and do understand the technical architecture very well. 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 Did my own research & successfully implemented BW with Web technology. 02 font 02 li 01 li
- 01 font 00 For further information please refer to my resume as enclose 02 font 02 li 02 ul
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01 font 00 With all the justification mentioned above, I am looking for mutual benefits for both, BAT and myself. What BAT concern, is to pay my rate according to my skill set, 7 years of experience in IT sector and appropriate rate based industry standards for contractors and I will do my best to contribute my experience, talents, skills and abilities to the organization and the team. An appropriate market rate will be RM400 to RM500 per day or RM8,500 per month. 02 font 02 br
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01 font 00 Yours Sincerely, 02 br
00 Vincent 02 font 0-
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