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Dear Admission Officer,

Thank you for this opportunity. My name is Abdul-Basit Ilori, and I am submitting this essay to support my application for a Master’s Degree program in Public Health at your institution.

My motivation to pursue a public health degree stemmed from finding out from my father that my mother died a few weeks later from postpartum complications. Since then, I have wanted to become a public health advocate to help other families prevent such outcomes. This program will help me learn evidence-based methodologies and their applicability in complex real-life situations while leveraging new technologies.

And I plan to follow up this program with a medical degree at your institution and an extensive understudy of homeopathy.

While in high school, I would assist my mentor during his assessment and homeopathic treatment of his patients. This experience helped me understand the nature of several diseases and their unorthodox treatment methods.

In college, I would sometimes use my advisor’s private laboratory to test out some homeopathic drug I took from my mentor and understand its constituents. In 2017, I took up an internship opportunity at one of the largest pharmaceutical companies in Nigeria, where I learned about the fine art of drug testing and mass production.

The zeal and willingness to serve and contribute more to my society made me join, in school, despite some personal challenges, one of the world’s largest voluntary youth organizations, the World Organization of Scout Movement, apart from my religious affiliation’s social works.

I got involved with several campaigns, including an annual blood donation campaign in Ogun and Kwara State and a medical outreach project in Edo State. I was also part of the team that organized campaigns in Kwara State against violence, promotion of peace, and others on afforestation to contribute to cleaner air quality in furtherance of the United Nation’s SDG goals.

Perhaps these qualities, combined with my community service projects and athletic abilities, contributed to being nominated as one of the 100 Most Influential Students on Campus.

Currently, I am volunteering at a hospital in Niger State to understand some of the pain points of the under-served communities and gain a better experience.

I chose to study in the United Kingdom because it ranks among the topmost educational systems worldwide, and its universities offer premium education with hands-on experience. Additionally, the University of Chester provides not only a vibrant, diverse and safe home for international students but also provides a rich heritage of 180 years of teaching excellence -As is evident from the recent approval she got for her graduate medical-entry program.

I believe my passion for service and abilities will help me contribute to the growth of the student body and the public health program. Undoubtedly, I would face challenges living abroad, but it is an adventure I have trained for and would thrive.

I thank you for taking the time to evaluate my essay, and I look forward to arriving at Chester University soon.