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Renad El Azab Posted 12 years ago
Letter Writing

[URGENT Due date Jan 16] Personal Statement for NESA Undergraduate Exchange Program

Hello guys,

I'm applying for the Near East And South Asia Undergraduate Exchange Program. It's similar to Global UGRAD exchange program. They asked me to write a 450 words personal statement.

Please give me your feedback because I'm in great rush because my due date is January 16. Thanks in advance.

Personal Statement Questions: Please describe why you would like to study in the U.S. What past experiences, interests, or personal traits have given you this motivation? How will studying in the NESA UGRAD Program help you learn about America? How will learning about the U.S. influence your personal and professional goals?

Personal Statement for NESA Undergraduate Exchange Program

I've always seen myself as a seeker. I seek new experiences, and what's a better than experiencing life in America? I was always fond of the language and culture of the U.S. I grew up in a community where being different isn't always accepted, but I never tried to fit in; instead I saw my uniqueness as God's gift for me, and I valued it. Studying in the U.S will give the chance to discover new sides of myself, as well as having quality education. My major is Microbiology which requires lots of practical work; but most of what we learn at my university is theoretical, which doesn't prepare us well for our future careers. Besides, the teaching methods in the U.S. develop skills like communication, collaborating and critical thinking.

I've lived in Saudi Arabia for 3 years; there I met people from different countries. I adapted and interacted with them easily. I believe I'm open-minded and can accept people for who they are. Therefore, the culture diversity of the U.S would be no trouble for me. Writing and Graphic Design are two of my greatest passions. Although I majored in Microbiology, that didn't stop me from enjoying these two fields. Last summer, I took a Graphics Diploma and I learned how to use the latest versions of Adobe programs. I'm now selling my art online, this made me independent and more mature. As for writing, I own a blog where I write short stories. In college, I joined the Literature Club which publishes a monthly literary magazine. Recently I became a staff writer for a web magazine called PopWrapped, where I learned how the system of magazines works and how to work under deadline pressure. For the past 2 years, I worked with several charity organizations, one of them teaches illiterate people and children how to write and read; this made me appreciate my education even more, and it gave me great pleasure to be able to help those in need and give back to my community.

My wish is to combine between my interest in science and writing, that's why I'd like to pursue my year as an exchange student in the University of Michigan-Ann Arbor, because it's known for its great biological sciences and writing programs. I'm also interested in a course called "Writing in the Sciences" launched by Stanford University. Likewise, it serves my desire to get the best of both fields.

I'd consider myself a fortunate student if I was chosen to become part of the NESA UGRAD Exchange Program. I believe I could improve myself and benefit my host university, and surely contribute to my country with the profits I gained when I return.
  

Top answer

I have a few suggestions. It is a bit disorganized. Make sure each paragraph has a main point that you are making.

  • I have a few suggestions.
  • It is a bit disorganized.
  • Make sure each paragraph has a main point that you are making.
  • I've always seen myself as a seeker.
  • I seek new experiences, and what is a better than experiencing life in America?
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I have a few suggestions. It is a bit disorganized. Make sure each paragraph has a main point that you are making.

I've always seen myself as a seeker. I seek new experiences, and what is a better than experiencing life in America? I was have always been fond of the language and culture of the U.S. I
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Thanks I'll review it again.
But do you think there's something else I can add to make it more connected together? Did I cover the questions above?
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As you make your second draft, think about the questions, and add some phrases that reference the questions like "my life in Saudi Arabia exposed me to the diversity that I expect in the US, and also fueled my motivation to ...."

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