URGENT: Could anyone help me to check my Motivation Letter?

Hi!

I have just finished cover letter for PhD position (reference QAK1 4343). However I know my English skill is not good. So could anybody help me to check and comment it (below). I must send it tomorrow.

Thank you very much!

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January 20, 2009

Professor Email Removed?subject=position%20Reference%20FAK1%202008/175">X Y
Department of Computer Science
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Dear Professor Y:

I am writing to apply for the PhD position in Computer Science, reference QAK1 4343, at …….… University announced on the University web site. The position seems to fit very well with my education, experience, and career interests.

I graduated from ……. University (the top technology one in …….<my country>) with Bachelor’s degree in Computer Engineering in 2004. After that, I work as researcher for my lecturer for two years. Since then, I have been working in XYZ Ltd. Company as software developer and project leader. In addition, while working, I also finished and gained Master’s degree in Communication from the same University in 2006.

After 4 years working with many accomplish projects, I self-confident that the skills and qualifications you seek match my experience in this area:

· Being ……. administrator, building company Servers with firewall… are my responsibility.

· Completed many projects relate to network such as developing application that convert from ……. to ……., gateway application that generates ……., encoding ……. These give me real knowledge of ISO, TCP/IP network layers.

· Have ……. Certificate which is available in countries of Z council including , ASEAN. That helps to approve my software skill.

· Received ……. Prize in 2000, one of famous IT prize for young in …….. <mycountry>

· Accomplished projects on many fields: multimedia, network, ……. application.
All of these approve that researching is my strong point and interest. So I will be the best researcher for ……. group. In addition, hoping to understand about culture of , to improve English skill, to have the best professional researching environment are my motivations to apply for this PhD position.

Enclosed are copies of my curriculum vitae, academic transcripts, and degrees for your review. I believe I am an excellent candidate for this position. If you would like to schedule an interview or otherwise discuss my interest in this position, please email to …….<myemail> or call me at …….<myphone>. I will be available at your convenience.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,

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