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Anonymous Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing

Urgent, Correct this letter please

Dear President,



We wanted to thank you for having been so welcoming during our visit to ... for the 50th ceremony of the twinned towns.

Through you, we discovered with delight the city of ..., a city with a very huge and fabulous heritage, with a really cordial population.

For us, it was the occasion to realise how close were our cities since they offer deep similarities. Meeting you and discovering your city gave us the desire to renew our desire to strengthen our friendship relations and to develop some co-operation links with the city of .....

To this end, we would be delighted to meet you again to speak about a possible twinning between our two respective towns and to make you discover the beauty and the splendours of the city of ....
Looking forward to hearing from you soon,
  

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Hello, This is a nice letter, I've just changed a couple of your word choices and removed a few 'extra' words to make it sound more natural. We wanted to thank you for having been so welcoming during our visit to ... for the 50 th ceremony of the twinned towns.

  • Hello, This is a nice letter, I've just changed a couple of your word choices and removed a few 'extra' words to make it sound more natural.
  • We wanted to thank you for having been so welcoming during our visit to ...
  • for the 50 th ceremony of the twinned towns.
  • , a city with an interesting heritage and really friendly people.
  • For us, it was a chance to see how similar our cities are.
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Hello, This is a nice letter, I've just changed a couple of your word choices and removed a few 'extra' words to make it sound more natural.

We wanted to thank you for having been so welcoming during our visit to ... for the 50th ceremony of the twinned towns. >>

Through you, we discovered with delight the city of ..., a city with an interesting heritage and rea
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instead of using interesting as an adjective for heritage, why don't you use RICH instead

RICH HERITAGE

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