unsure with grammer and context

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00I wrote this text but I am very unsure. So it would be very very very nice if you could correct it and proof it by grammer, spelling and if it is comprehensible. Eventually you could tell me if I shall write an conclusion (or if the introduction is enough). Please criticise the best you can and even name the most unimportant mistake.02br
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00Thank you very much.02br
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00Mrs. Smith’s political speech from July 2003 is given in rhetorical language and engaged with diverse stylistic devices to persuade the audience of his proposal.02br
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00Smith focuses on the listener’s sense of coherence and convincing them that only an active involvement will lead to alteration.02br
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00Thus he firstly uses the possessive pronoun “my grandmother” (l.2) to include the audience into his family and intensifying the impression of togetherness and intimacy.02br
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00The repetition of “and” (l.5) shall clarify the importance of each enumerated value (beauty, power, culture) and accordingly the significance of striving after these.02br
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00For that reason he continues with the imperative “we must build such a company” to achieve the comprehension that the listeners have to contribute actively to the establishment of an unity. This appeal additionally supports the fictional dialogue between speaker and audience and establishes solidarity through the inclusive pronoun “we”. Through this, a more personal contact, even when mediated, between Smith and his listeners is reached.02br
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00Furthermore, the metaphor of the “rainbow” and its “colours”, which is used constantly during the speech, serves as a device to illustrate that the different ethnic groups have to unify in order realize their targets.02br
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00In this regard, Smith compares the individual social groups and their efforts with the single colours of the rainbow. This example shall visualise that the colours cannot make a rainbow for their selves, as the interests of the assemblies alone will not contribute to common welfare. 00 00This metaphor involves the audience in the creation of the persuader’s idea and is accordingly more conceived and supported.02br
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00Another stylistic device the speaker makes use of is parallelism (l.7-l.15). The sentences with identical syntax and partial the same words intensify the function of appeal and make the context more memorable for the listener.02br
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00Again he augments the importance of unifying and even assigns national priority to this matter by the repetition of “and” (l.20-23). Here he evokes values and conditions which are of great value and should accordingly be aspired.0-