Unit 3: Getting the message across Writting

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The line graph gives the information about the percentages of teachers who were employed in Ontario from 2001 to 2007.
At the beginning of the period, English teachers had higher opportunities to find a job. In 2001, 71% of English teachers found a stable job. In contrast, 70% of French teachers who were employed in the same year. In 2002, both group of teachers saw dropped significantly by 17 %. Form 2002 to 2003, the percentages of English teachers decrease dramatically to 40 % while there was considerable increase about 68% of French group. After four years, the percentages of French rose slightly with minor fluctuation. However, the employment of new graduates as English teachers increase slightly to 45% form 2003 to 2005 before falling to 29% in 2007.
Overall, the percentages of French teachers increased between 2003 and 2007, but the trend for English teachers was the opposite.

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I think I have found the image of the graph. In future, please attach the image yourself! If you have difficulty attaching it, send me a PM, and I will help you.

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The line graph ~~gives the information about~~ tracks the percentages of fresh graduate teachers, who taught either English or French, and who were employed in Ontario from 2001 to 2007.

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[ 2] Overall, the line for French teachers declined, whereas the one for English teachers saw no major change.

At the beginning of the period, ~~English~~ teachers, of either language, had ~~higher~~ reasonable opportunities (around 70%) to find a job. ~~In 2001, 71% of English teachers found a stable job. In contrast, 70% of French teachers who were employed in the same year~~. In 2002, both groups of teachers saw ~~dropped significantly by~~ significant drops of around [ 3] 17% in the number getting employed.

Form 2002 to 2003, the graphs diverged, with the percentages of English teachers decreasing dramatically to 40%, while there was a considerable increase to about 68% of for the French group.

Over the following two years, both lines rose slightly, almost in parallel, but in 2006, both fell, with the one representing English teachers declining more sharply. However in the final year, the percentage of French teachers picked up to end at approximately 75%, whereas the one for English teachers continued its decline to a low of around 18%.

After four years, the percentages of French rose slightly with minor fluctuation. However, the employment of new graduates as English teachers increase slightly to 45% form 2003 to 2005 before falling to 29% in 2007.

~~Overall, the percentages of French teachers increased between 2003 and 2007, but the trend for English teachers was the opposite~~.

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[ 1]: Use a blank line to separate your paragraphs. It makes the text easier to read.

[ 2]: The overall statement goes after the introductory one.

[ 3]: Note the space I removed (~~17 %~~ -----> 17%)

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