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Ayan86 Posted 11 years ago
Grammar
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In each specific case, the aforementioned rights may be restricted pursuant to the decision taken by the board, if there are justified suspicions that the shareholder may use the acquired information contrary to the company's objectives, thus, causing significant damages or losses to the Company or a subject from the same concern, or to third parties.
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Is the underlined part grammatical? Any changes necessary?
In each specific case, the aforementioned rights may be restricted pursuant to the decision taken by the board, if there are justified suspicions that the shareholder may use the acquired information contrary to the company's objectives, thus, causing significant damages or losses to the Company or a subject from the same concern, or to third parties.
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Too much legalese. " "In each specific case" adds nothing. "justified suspicions" is an invitation to litigation over what's justified and what's not All information used must be acquired first.
- Too much legalese.
- " "In each specific case" adds nothing.
- "justified suspicions" is an invitation to litigation over what's justified and what's not All information used must be acquired first.
- Losses are a form of damage.
- I don't know what "a subject from the same concern" is, so I guessed.
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Too much legalese.
"The board may restrict the aforementioned rights of any shareholder who, in the board's judgment, may use the information in a manner contrary to the company's objectives or may cause significant damage to the Company, the Company's employees and agents, or to unrelated third parties."
"In each specific case" adds nothing.
"justified suspicions" is an invi
"The board may restrict the aforementioned rights of any shareholder who, in the board's judgment, may use the information in a manner contrary to the company's objectives or may cause significant damage to the Company, the Company's employees and agents, or to unrelated third parties."
"In each specific case" adds nothing.
"justified suspicions" is an invi
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