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Moradar Posted 17 years ago
Hi ! I am minutes away from mailing my cover letter, 1 sentence left and its too big and unclear .
I am an excellent team player. According to my Belbin classification, I am a “completer finisher”. There is always plenty of work; but I am among those who make one more step to complete what has been started. If, to complete a project, it is necessary to find an always-very-busy-expert, I will be the one to find him/her, conduct a 10 minute discussion, find out what are the obstacles and manage to finish the work on time. Teamwork is an opportunity for me to obtain knowledge, for example, thanks to well organized teamwork I know the difference between agile and waterfall development processes.
Thank you,
Moradar .
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UNCLEAR HUGE, LONG SENTENCE ! HELP TO KEEP THE MEANING AND MAKE IT SHORTER!
Hi ! I am minutes away from mailing my cover letter, 1 sentence left and its too big and unclear .
I am an excellent team player. According to my Belbin classification, I am a “completer finisher”. There is always plenty of work; but I am among those who make one more step to complete what has been started. If, to complete a project, it is necessary to find an always-very-busy-expert, I will be the one to find him/her, conduct a 10 minute discussion, find out what are the obstacles and manage to finish the work on time. Teamwork is an opportunity for me to obtain knowledge, for example, thanks to well organized teamwork I know the difference between agile and waterfall development processes.
Thank you,
Moradar .
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Moradar: Which sentence are you having a problem with? I found your text to be very understandable.
- Moradar: Which sentence are you having a problem with?
- I found your text to be very understandable.
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Moradar:
Which sentence are you having a problem with? I found your text to be very understandable.
Which sentence are you having a problem with? I found your text to be very understandable.
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Yes, I think the sentence is too long and rambling.
Try:
I enjoy teamwork because it is an opportunity for me to learn new knowledge, such as knowing the difference between agile and waterfall development processes (whatever that is). I will also aim to complete any work on time and will seek advice from experts if needed.
Chris
Try:
I enjoy teamwork because it is an opportunity for me to learn new knowledge, such as knowing the difference between agile and waterfall development processes (whatever that is). I will also aim to complete any work on time and will seek advice from experts if needed.
Chris
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This sentence definitely needs work. It rambles.
I am an excellent team player. I enjoy obstacles and consider them a challenge for finishing work on time. I understand the importance of teamwork and consider any personality differences as an opportunity to learn about myself and others.
Hope this helps, and good luck!
I am an excellent team player. I enjoy obstacles and consider them a challenge for finishing work on time. I understand the importance of teamwork and consider any personality differences as an opportunity to learn about myself and others.
Hope this helps, and good luck!
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