Two sentances

Question

I am writing an essay and i am struggling with two sentences, and I hope bee happy for all help I can get.

The first:
This can be done by prioritizing copyright infringement crimes or by increasing the funds for the police.

My question should there be any commas around or.

The second:
IPRED isn't a big controversy because it criminalizes illegal file sharing; it is because it gives copyright holders the right to do police work.

I think the beginning of the second part sounds quite awkward, but I can't find any better way of writing it without keeping the same structure or making the second part really long. I would appreciate any help or suggestions.

I just want to say that English is not my native tongue.

Thanks in advance

Andreas.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,
Welcome to the Forum.

I am writing an essay and i am struggling with two sentences, and I hope bee happy for all help I can get.

The first:
This can be done by prioritizing copyright infringement crimes or by increasing the funds for the police.

My question should there be any commas around or. You don't need any commas.

The second:
IPRED isn't a big controversy because it criminalizes illegal file sharing; it is because it gives copyright holders the right to do police work.

I think the beginning of the second part sounds quite awkward, but I can't find any better way of writing it without keeping the same structure or making the second part really long. I would appreciate any help or suggestions.

IPRED is not a big controversy because it criminalizes illegal file sharing; it is a big controversy because it gives copyright holders the right to do police work.

IPRED is a big controversy, not because it criminalizes illegal file sharing, but because it gives copyright holders the right to do police work.

The latter version is better, in my opinion.

Instead of 'IPRED is a big controversy', I'd say 'IPRED is very controversial'.

Best wishes, Clive

Klalle · Answer

CliveHi,
Welcome to the Forum.

Thank you for welcoming me and for a fast response. I really like your suggestion and i totally agree that the second is better. It is a lot better to say "it is" instead of "it is not".

Andreas

Two sentances

Top answer

Get the Weekly English Kit 📬

Related Questions