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Quaerereverum Posted 15 years ago
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TV has destroyed communication among family members.
Would you please be kind to correct my article. I'm not sure whether it is proper English.
TV has destroyed communication among family.
I disagree wih this statement for 2 reasons. The first reason is that when we watch our favorite program, we don't like to talk; otherwaise, we can't concenterate and get the point. For instance: when I've watched The Oprah show, I didn't like to talk to my sister, but after the program we talked about it a lot. As a metter of fact, watching TV gives us a topic to talk with each other at home. The second reason is that, people are used to exagerate the role of TV, because it is easier to put the blame on TV if something goes wrong in their lives. Since you can find TV in all houses, but not all family members have the same problem. Thank uou in advance.
TV has destroyed communication among family.
I disagree wih this statement for 2 reasons. The first reason is that when we watch our favorite program, we don't like to talk; otherwaise, we can't concenterate and get the point. For instance: when I've watched The Oprah show, I didn't like to talk to my sister, but after the program we talked about it a lot. As a metter of fact, watching TV gives us a topic to talk with each other at home. The second reason is that, people are used to exagerate the role of TV, because it is easier to put the blame on TV if something goes wrong in their lives. Since you can find TV in all houses, but not all family members have the same problem. Thank uou in advance.
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I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate material. In future, do not paste preformatted material into a post because it is difficult to read. TV has destroyed communication among family .
- I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate material.
- In future, do not paste preformatted material into a post because it is difficult to read.
- TV has destroyed communication among family .
- I disagree wih this statement for 2 reasons.
- The first reason is that when we watch our favorite program, we don't like to talk; otherwaise , we can't concenterate and get the point.
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I have underlined problem areas and struck out inappropriate material. In future, do not paste preformatted material into a post because it is difficult to read.
TV has destroyed communication among family.
I disagree wih this statement for 2 reasons. The first reason is that when we watch our favorite program, we don't like to talk; ot
TV has destroyed communication among family.
I disagree wih this statement for 2 reasons. The first reason is that when we watch our favorite program, we don't like to talk; ot
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