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Daniellecrotts Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

Trying to help edit a book for a friend

Can someone fix this grammar or rewrite this sentence for me please? Sometimes her context gets complicated and I need no opinions over the statement please. Thanks -----Concerning threatening religions in America such as New Age, Islam, and Islam brotherhood groups, will be offended by those who declare Jesus Christ is truly the son of God.
  

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daniellecrotts Concerning threatening religions in America such as New Age, Islam, and Islam brotherhood groups, will be offended by those who declare Jesus Christ is truly the son of ***. I am also baffled by the construction of this sentence. " is not a subject which is absent as written.

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  • daniellecrotts Concerning threatening religions in America such as New Age, Islam, and Islam brotherhood groups, will be offended by those who declare Jesus Christ is truly the son of ***.
  • I am also baffled by the construction of this sentence.
  • " is not a subject which is absent as written.
  • If my interpretation is correct, this may be one of many ways to express the intended meaning: Religions, such as New Age, Islam, and Islam brotherhood groups which post threats to America, will be offended by those who declare Jesus Christ is truly the son of ***.
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daniellecrottsConcerning threatening religions in America such as New Age, Islam, and Islam brotherhood groups, will be offended by those who declare Jesus Christ is truly the son of ***.
I am also baffled by the construction of this sentence. The participle phrase " Concerning threatening religions......" is not a subject which is absent as written. If my in
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Hello daniellecrotts;

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Concerning threatening religions in America such as New Age, Islam, and Islam brotherhood groups, will be offended by those who declare
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Her work is so complex and so hard to understand. I think it has a lot to do with her poor grammar and word usage. This is just suppose to be a rough edit, but right now it is too rough to send to the publishing company, even if they do another edit. Thanks everyone for your help.
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daniellecrottsright now it is too rough to send to the publishing company
Definitely. It needs a lot of polishing before approaching the publishers. Sending a manuscript with poor grammar and inappropriate word usage could jeopardize the chance of being published at all.

CJ
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I completely agree and have explained this to her, but she is very strong willed. The publishers deadline is Monday; with this time frame and plot of such intricacy, we may not meet our timespan. I was just put on this manuscript Wednesday. This is my first time editing others' work too. Wish me luck!
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daniellecrottsediting
Editing? I think it's going to be more like rewriting! Good luck! Emotion: smile
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