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Nguyên Phạm Posted 8 years ago
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Hi, me again. I wrote this paragraph this morning and my teacher gave me 5.5 points/10.

Please help me. Many thanks.

Topic 3: Why students get rid of university.

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There are more younger people getting rid of university today for some reasons. One of the most obvious ones is that they lack parents’ care. Many students’ parents are busy with their work, so they don’t have much time to take care of their children. Thus, they are addicted to games or other leisure activities instead of focusing on their study. Secondly, the students can have difficulty in tuition fees. Obviously, the fees in universities are higher than ever before to afford. They spend a lot of time earning money on their own by part – time jobs. This results in distraction from their study and bad results in exams. The last cause is that the courses they are taking are difficult. Types of assignments at universities vary and are designed to encourage critical thinking and independent learning. There is no one to help them, they have to do it by themselves. This will undoubtedly make them more bored and discouraged. In short, getiing rid of university is very common nowadays for three main reasons mentioned above.

  

Top answer

That topic makes no logical sense. If we got rid of universities, their professors would have to find other jobs. The buildings would be converted into hospitals, government or office buildings.

  • That topic makes no logical sense.
  • If we got rid of universities, their professors would have to find other jobs.
  • The buildings would be converted into hospitals, government or office buildings.
  • Online learning is conducted by universities, so these courses would be shut down too.
  • Universities provide the education for all the professions.
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That topic makes no logical sense. If we got rid of universities, their professors would have to find other jobs. The buildings would be converted into hospitals, government or office buildings. Online learning is conducted by universities, so these courses would be shut down too.

Universities provide the education for all the professions. Without universities, there would be no future

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