TOEFL speaking response ?

i've just taken a mock TOEFL exam. here is my speaking response and i hope someone here will

read it and tell me my mistakes (or correct words , grammar..)Thanks in advance.

(bold words are sentences that i think they may have a problem)

SPEAKING
1.What is your dream job ?

When it comes to my dream jobs , i wish that one day i could become a famous
football player.
First, i am a big football fan.
when i was young , i would watch for hours football matches on T.V
i would dream about playing football like my idols on T.V
everything about football seemed so fascinating so possible to me .
Furthermore, in my child 's mind i thought as a professional player
i could have a chance to play football everyday and win a lot of
championships .
So my life would become happy and my parents would proud of me.

2.Are you forgetful or do you always remember important things ?

i am proud to say that i hardly ever forget important things.
First , i have a very good memory .
My friends are often impressed when i speak accurately from memory their birthdays
or recite long poems ,sometimes even a story word for word.
therefore it's almost impossible for me to forget a scheduled work or miss an important meeting.
Furthermore , to avoid memory lapses i have a very effective trick , and that is
to write down all the appointments and deadlines in my datebook and skim it everynight.
that will remind me exactly what i'm gonna to do on the next day.